replying on Waiting to fall by aliena
13 Mar 2008, 6:44 PM
Point taken :)
on Lines Composed in a Vancouver Skyscraper by david
5 Dec 2006, 12:16 AM
I could see Vancouver in my mind's eye
on Just words by aliena
15 Nov 2006, 9:08 PM
Thanks Howl. I agree. I am thinking of a suitable line to clarify my intent.
on Just words by aliena
15 Nov 2006, 9:07 PM
Thanks Ranger! Point taken. Will make the change in the revised version.
on Writing the Books by validus_vox
25 Apr 2004, 10:28 AM
I strolled with you..
on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin
2 Apr 2004, 12:08 AM
Excellent, excellent!!! take a 10 for this poem about my favourite impressionist
replying on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena
2 Apr 2004, 12:03 AM
thanks fr the suggestion... I had orignally considered fallen leaves, but leaves is better
replying on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena
2 Apr 2004, 12:00 AM
LOL :-)
replying on Municipal park by richa
1 Apr 2004, 11:56 PM
What is the final verdict? has or have?
on Municipal park by richa
1 Apr 2004, 11:56 PM
what is the fibal verdict? has or have?
on lullaby by the indign
1 Apr 2004, 11:51 PM
"as the dawn begins to fade
brightening up the dusk" How??
brightening up the dusk" How??
on Color me Lifeless by alverland theme park
1 Apr 2004, 11:44 PM
"halting my whole world" ???
on Cargo pants by tre
1 Apr 2004, 11:39 PM
loved it..
on PEOPLE. (Debut) by Doc
1 Apr 2004, 11:37 PM
Waiting for part 2
on Shampoo and Condition by Luzr
1 Apr 2004, 9:34 AM
My routine has been quite as meaningless for the past 2 months. Perhaps even more so. It can summed in 4 words... eat, sleep, eat, sleep....... Wish I could put it words like you
replying on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena
1 Apr 2004, 9:30 AM
thanks. I agree with you about interpretation. Mourning dead leaves? LOL never thought of that!! Interesting... Actually, I was flattering myself that the thunder was mourning my crushed dreams!! [along with the fallen leaves of course] Or maybe it is mourning all mankind's disappointments.... I guess I am raving a little bit today...
replying on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena
1 Apr 2004, 9:24 AM
Thanks. I edited in haste and so mispelled "reverberating" :-(. The situation is like this. It is thundering sporadically outside and it kind of reminds me of an approaching plane. Maybe I should remove that whole line...
replying on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena
1 Apr 2004, 9:18 AM
Hey thanks. This jet is causing lot of trouble. Actually, it is still thundering sporadically outside. It kind of reminds me of an approching plane. I suppose I included that line to make the whole thing vivid.. Would it be better if I just removed the line?
replying on Leaves, hope and dreams by aliena
1 Apr 2004, 9:13 AM
This jet is causing too many problems.. Actually its is still sporadically thundering outside here. It does remind of a plane approaching... maybe the poem would be better off sans the jet line I suppose...