on Slow motion by INTRANSIT
1 Feb 2003, 7:28 PM
Makes a good poening to a story but not much of a poem by itself. It needs more. I'll vote when you add to it.
on Cant sleep, clown will eat me.(A poem about clowns) by lunar
1 Feb 2003, 1:20 PM
This is Great. Almost funnier than the T-Shirt.
on some deleted poem
1 Feb 2003, 1:38 PM
Ending needs reworked but i really liked the "stomach punched hangover"
on Great Waters of End by marvelis
1 Feb 2003, 2:34 PM
This seems like a longer version of life. Which wouldn't be so bad but It feels like your just saying the same things over and over again. -5- Try making this shorter or life longer.
on Confession by marvelis
1 Feb 2003, 2:37 PM
Much better than your other two. -9-
on some deleted poem
1 Feb 2003, 2:43 PM
Sad. Just Sad. Hope this cheers you up. -10-
on Impossibilities, and Marvel Comical Heroes. by Bachus
1 Feb 2003, 2:51 PM
Ahahahahahahahahahahaha. Wait nope Ahahahahahahahahahahahaha still funny.
on A Little Nightmare by Teen14
31 Jan 2003, 4:52 PM
Your close to caputing it but maybe a few less gomez runs at the beginning so that you build a sort of increasing frenzy.
on Dancers of the Night by Teen14
1 Feb 2003, 3:00 PM
Wait smoke wants darkness to end? Smoke causes Darkness. Other than that i like it -7-
on Run Forest! Run... by Bachus
1 Feb 2003, 3:03 PM
Hehehehe Thats twice in one day you made me laugh. -8-
on some deleted poem
1 Feb 2003, 3:08 PM
How sad.
on Equality by Freethinker1602
31 Jan 2003, 12:09 PM
I know I don't have any room to talk but I don't know the "so run far and pray your feet be swift be quick witted" just Doesn't seem to fit in well.
on Jesus rides the comet by Shardik
31 Jan 2003, 12:17 PM
Got to agree with razorgrin this is quite swell.
on some deleted poem
31 Jan 2003, 9:00 AM
This one is pretty dull even for a real life occurance
on some deleted poem
30 Jan 2003, 5:04 PM
I like what I see. It has real potental and no I'm not going to say it needs depth. I think it just needs to be longer.
on A Green Moons Haze by pink_punk_kisses87
29 Jan 2003, 5:29 PM
I agree its a ten but you might change threw to through. It'd make it so that someone didn't mentally trip over your words, unless that was what you were going for.
on A Day, Wasted by Joyleaf
29 Jan 2003, 5:24 PM
Been there done that and i like this one. So i give you an dime.
Drinking Vodka
open cupboard, grab bottle
sit back and enjoy