replying on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Aug 2006, 9:49 AM
That explains every thing, save for the meaning of life.
replying on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Aug 2006, 9:15 AM
*I'm should be I've.
replying on Guilt Trip by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Aug 2006, 9:15 AM
Really? You don't say? I'm surprised you feel that way considering that all of my live audiences have loved it and clapped, every time I'm ever sung it.
replying on James The Dashing Pirate(Rewrite) by Luzr
8 Apr 2006, 1:55 PM
Or I could be patient, let others read it, hear some good advice, and not behave like a child when the "Mature" Adults say something I don't like. Arguing online is like being in the special olympics, even if you win, your still a retard.
replying on Generation Next, Fuck you(The Fake Out) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
31 Jan 2006, 9:51 PM
It is everything that was in my head at one moment, at one time. Flames of thought, burning bright, junping torch to torch in death, lighting dark recesses, buried beneath a coat of dust, being swept away, to be poured down the drain, as you question, these strange breath's that I call an answer, are merely images captured by a floating attention span, traslated to text in my passing with a computer screen.
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replying on Generation Next, Fuck you(The Fake Out) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
30 Jan 2006, 2:15 PM
You hit it on the head(No pun intended). As for the month for blowjob poems, thats more next month.
;-)
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;-)
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replying on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom
8 Dec 2005, 3:16 PM
Ripping off 80s lyrics? The only music from the 80s I have listened to is a few punk rock bands, and even then I haven't listened to them since I was 19. During the 80s when I was a small child my parents only listened to country and the beatles, so... I don't think I could possibly know I was ripping off 80s lyrics.
As for the rest of that, fuck you too. I was having a bad day when I read your last comment and I'm have a worse one today. As for writing the same crap, I'm fucking 21. Lot of life experiance that gives me huh? Same mistakes, how ever will I know that they are mistakes unless someone points them out to me(Besides the dryer doesn't even fucking start until you close the door, and we both know my head is way to big to let the dryer close)?
Sorry I snapped, but oh well, goto hell, and the whatever else
Later Daze
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As for the rest of that, fuck you too. I was having a bad day when I read your last comment and I'm have a worse one today. As for writing the same crap, I'm fucking 21. Lot of life experiance that gives me huh? Same mistakes, how ever will I know that they are mistakes unless someone points them out to me(Besides the dryer doesn't even fucking start until you close the door, and we both know my head is way to big to let the dryer close)?
Sorry I snapped, but oh well, goto hell, and the whatever else
Later Daze
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replying on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom
6 Dec 2005, 1:40 PM
The smart ass answer
1. Mental instability, perhaps a long standing grude, and opportunity.
The Stab in the Dark Answer
2. The man was her sister
A further Stab in the Dark Answer
3. The man was her sister and she fucked him before being told his true identity
A far fetched idea
4. It's really complicated and involves being ones own grandmother type shit. I'm sure you don't want to even hear that one.
And my honest answer
5. I have no fucking clue
1. Mental instability, perhaps a long standing grude, and opportunity.
The Stab in the Dark Answer
2. The man was her sister
A further Stab in the Dark Answer
3. The man was her sister and she fucked him before being told his true identity
A far fetched idea
4. It's really complicated and involves being ones own grandmother type shit. I'm sure you don't want to even hear that one.
And my honest answer
5. I have no fucking clue
replying on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom
6 Dec 2005, 1:33 PM
Please, if I was writing to the tune of a song it'd be far more likely to an artist whose only emerged within the last 10 years.
Everything I write is awful. I could steal the writer's digest annual poetry competition's 1st place entry and you'd still think it was awful. I have 2 words for you, drop dead. It'd be far better than coming back here, where like it or not, your part of a warmachine controlled by a man whose snorted more coke at one time than most people will ever see in a lifetime.
Everything I write is awful. I could steal the writer's digest annual poetry competition's 1st place entry and you'd still think it was awful. I have 2 words for you, drop dead. It'd be far better than coming back here, where like it or not, your part of a warmachine controlled by a man whose snorted more coke at one time than most people will ever see in a lifetime.
on Ignorant Children by Stacy Stewart
5 May 2005, 3:05 PM
Eh? It's long, and stops to really interest around the Religious remark. Really liked the following lines.
"The Lawyers that must at times, swim against the hem of the sea;
therefore
meaning public opinion."
There is controling your audience, and then there are failed attempts. This was a fairly good attempt. Like Alizarin_Crimson said a nice start, now trim it. Get to your point sooner, and if it's going to look this bulky, Reclassify it as a Prose Poem please.
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"The Lawyers that must at times, swim against the hem of the sea;
therefore
meaning public opinion."
There is controling your audience, and then there are failed attempts. This was a fairly good attempt. Like Alizarin_Crimson said a nice start, now trim it. Get to your point sooner, and if it's going to look this bulky, Reclassify it as a Prose Poem please.
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on Love without end by windyone
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
"Pimple" look up the definition in the poem type. A -3- because it's painfully cliche.
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on Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
The first verse I think could use a little more effort put into the meter. Everything else seems to flow naturally, written to be read out loud. Interesting Story telling. -9-
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on Just Another Poem by Damien
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
I'm a big fan of Math and Logic. However this is good stuff. -8-
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on PLEASE VOTE FOR MELANIE by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Politics + Your Head = Gold
I assume this is about some British Election coming up?
I assume this is about some British Election coming up?
on Get Out Of My Life by Brittanyy
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
"Pimple" Look up the defintion in poem types. -4- until it gets the right classification.
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replying on Next time by Billy Fights
3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
It's classified as a pimple, because the Idea's are Cliche as hell. Plus it's not finished. It still needs a verse or two. The second is strong but doesn't lead clearly into the third. Besides, I don't think I've seen an actually bad poem labeled pimple. It's freeverses I worry about.
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on Fingers Are Soldiers by somemorepoetry
27 Apr 2005, 10:42 PM
***Jawless comrades
***Gape at us with
***Broken, edited teeth.
Damn good images in this. Some of them bloody as hell, but damn good.
***Gape at us with
***Broken, edited teeth.
Damn good images in this. Some of them bloody as hell, but damn good.
on I killed you in New Mexico by sunset sky
27 Apr 2005, 10:30 PM
2nd stanza is incredible. Why 5 lines in the other two stanzas? Why not just keep the lines "Kneeling and bleeding to death" and "I was your temple-worship Hand me down" as one line instead of two. I think the writing is better than the form here. Still a 10 in my book.
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1 : having little or no education; especially : unable to read or write
Obviously I can read and write
2 a : showing or marked by a lack of familiarity with language and literature <an illiterate magazine> b : violating approved patterns of speaking or writing
My vocabulary is fine. Considering that this is poetry, approved patterns don't really mean fuck.
3 : showing or marked by a lack of acquaintance with the fundamentals of a particular field of knowledge <musically illiterate>
You might have me on three, if you include the larger body of everything I've ever written. However, whether or not I'm an illiterate or not doesn't change one fact.
You are a Bitch. So please, do the world a favor, and go choke yourself on a big black sweaty aids infested penis.
Your also stupid. A rational person would think, "oh god no, he wrote another one" and merely skipped over my submission, if they truly hated what I wrote so badly. You apparently lack the brains to do this.
Making you a Stupid Bitch.
Have a nice day Edna
I look forward to hearing from you
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