on Shadow by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:45 PM
I like how you stick to one subject but this isn't all that great. -5-
on Deceased by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:43 PM
Sounds alot like something Mr.Pig wrote that I liked. -8-
on In Debt by talking_goldfish
18 Apr 2003, 12:39 PM
Just strange.
replying on Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom
18 Apr 2003, 12:37 PM
And why ever not?
replying on Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom
18 Apr 2003, 12:36 PM
I never said that it wasn't questionable. I was merely showing the guidelines by which I was going. The experiance I'm describing is literally a decent into madness(of which D.A. is very right this poem is by and about a lunatic), this literally is one of my nightmares, put into words, at the best of my abilities at the present, of which I apologize if it doesn't fit into a ryhming lines or neat little stanzas, or most of the other niffy little rules that most people consider to be poetic. SO FEEL FREE TO QUESTION ITS STATUS AS A POEM AND GOOD EVENING TO YOU! o
replying on Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom
17 Apr 2003, 12:55 PM
Glad you like it D.A.
replying on Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom
17 Apr 2003, 12:51 PM
A poem(as defined in a dictionary) is 1.A verbal composition designed to convey experiences, ideas, or emotions in a vivid and imaginative way, characterized by the use of language chosen for its sound and suggestive power and by the use of literary techniques such as meter, metaphor, and rhyme.
2.A composition in verse rather than in prose.
3.A literary composition written with an intensity or beauty of language more characteristic of poetry than of prose.
4.A creation, object, or experience having beauty suggestive of poetry.
2.A composition in verse rather than in prose.
3.A literary composition written with an intensity or beauty of language more characteristic of poetry than of prose.
4.A creation, object, or experience having beauty suggestive of poetry.
replying on Descent into Madness by thepinkbunnyofdoom
14 Apr 2003, 10:58 PM
Thanks for the advice. Any and all help in making this better is more than welcome.
*hacks up a furball* huh?? hmmm??? wha? is it over yet? You lost my attention, about halfway through the first, Stanza/paragraph. It maybe the subject but It feels really repetive, like I've heard it before, redundent, cliche, and so on and so forth and what have ya. It might also be helpful if I could tell if you were being sarcastic with the live=evil rip off, or if you just thought it'd be cute and clever. I see that some effort was put forth(one way or another) and cause I have a real hard time with giving a zero to anything that has some effort, just for you a -2-.
on My pimp's ceiling fan by Shardik
14 Apr 2003, 1:23 PM
Once again confusing and I can feel my brain going into the redline so before it explodes -9-
replying on My pimp's ceiling fan by Shardik
14 Apr 2003, 1:21 PM
God your a sick Beast lover! Whats the matter? You hate Gang Box? I think you need to get your ears tested. True I'll admit that J.B.H. isn't gonna be bumpin' out my stereo but Its not so bad as Animal rape(which I'm sure you order enough dvds of to tell the difference).
P.S. If your going to do a 1-900- number make sure it has at least 7 letters or digits after it. As for the busy writing poetry bit? All I got to say How did you get those little wings?
P.S. If your going to do a 1-900- number make sure it has at least 7 letters or digits after it. As for the busy writing poetry bit? All I got to say How did you get those little wings?
on The Smarts aint Stupids by Shardik
14 Apr 2003, 1:07 PM
My first reaction :WTF:
My second reaction :what the bloody fuck:
My third reaction :what a fuck:
My fourth reaction :awe fuck If I'm this confused give it a -10- and try and sort it out later:
My second reaction :what the bloody fuck:
My third reaction :what a fuck:
My fourth reaction :awe fuck If I'm this confused give it a -10- and try and sort it out later:
on a 9,000.00$ Philippine script treatment by Shardik
14 Apr 2003, 1:02 PM
Nice screen play. It seems to center more on Emilio than Ferdinand tho. So why is Ferdinand the PRINCIPAL CHARACTER?
on You by adrenalize
14 Apr 2003, 12:47 PM
well said -7-
on Flash of Light by Todd
14 Apr 2003, 12:45 PM
To best see the light one must stand in shadow
replying on Looking Down by thepinkbunnyofdoom
13 Apr 2003, 12:55 PM
and you thought the elephants were bad...
on Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome by Stephen Robins
12 Apr 2003, 12:47 PM
Take me with you.
on You Say by adrenalize
12 Apr 2003, 12:45 PM
Shame shame you have my permission to beat them with an old photo frame(no new ones cause why was something new) to the point of unconsiousness but no further! Its over when the lights go out! You Hear me! There are limits to how far you can go even when some one is that big an ANUS.
on The Warriors Song by cleverdevice
12 Apr 2003, 12:39 PM
Too much D&D for some body.