on Where's heaven? by cleverdevice
12 Apr 2003, 12:34 PM
Well said.
on RSPCA got here just a likkle bit late... by Yardbird
12 Apr 2003, 12:31 PM
If the Judge doesn't give 20 years
I'll bust out my garden shears
And stick'em up your rear
:)
-7-
I'll bust out my garden shears
And stick'em up your rear
:)
-7-
on Okay, so it doesn't actually work, it's still shit-funny... by Yardbird
12 Apr 2003, 12:28 PM
I'm in stiches Cause of those bitches!! -8-
on A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again)
12 Apr 2003, 8:14 AM
I'm not a big fan of parents but this almost brings tears to my eyes. Very well written. It feels heart felt. Worthy of many more, a -10-!!!
replying on Road to Recovery by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Apr 2003, 8:04 AM
I may not be on the nicest of terms with D.A. but, That one poem alone is better than anything I have ever read, and more than likely, will ever read. It should be a 100 on a scale of tens. I'm glad you like this. At least enough to consider it almost worthly of a ten and I'll try harder next time.
replying on Looking Down by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Apr 2003, 7:56 AM
Well it is a little cryptic but its actually just about staring at the sun.
replying on For Kristen by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Apr 2003, 7:54 AM
I'm not sure. If I watched it, Its been awhile since I've seen it. I only write in spurts so don't be too alarmed. Pretty soon I'll unable to write anything for months. Right now I write about 2 poems for every 3 days and I post about three aweek.
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" Here is a bunny. Not very cute but I call him Jason(thepinkfluffybunnyrabbitofdoom) just like me.
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" Here is a bunny. Not very cute but I call him Jason(thepinkfluffybunnyrabbitofdoom) just like me.
on What Hobbit songs are really like... by Bobjim
11 Apr 2003, 10:57 PM
Fine Fine Weed That You Smoke -9-
on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig
11 Apr 2003, 10:55 PM
Excellent on so many levels. 10 in my eyes.
on I can't write by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:40 PM
I wouldn't say that just not well
on God's Gift by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:39 PM
I read this and You just seem to be repeating your other works. No new thought, no New way of expressing the same thought.
on Nothin lasts by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:22 PM
I think this sounds alot like some of your other work but still very touching
on Feeling the dark by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:08 PM
Been There ALOT. -10-
on Never get it right by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 10:01 PM
The wording at the end is a bit confusing. Try keeping to one tense per line(i.e. and why everything we did or said just hurts us more) either drop the s on hurts or change did and said to do or say. Lose the "it" and/or the "right" in the last line. They just muddle your point.
on All the things i hate by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 9:52 PM
Somebody has been to block buster recently. Sounds a little too close to the movie. There are only 9 I hates tho. Why not add one and be that much closer?
replying on bottoms up by suckmychucks
11 Apr 2003, 8:49 PM
Why?? To be honest your not worth that much of my time. I gave you about 30 seconds out of my busy morning, which is quite nice of me I'd say and even that was too much.
replying on For Kristen by thepinkbunnyofdoom
11 Apr 2003, 3:41 AM
Only if you change it from Vilanelle. Cause Maria throughs The ryhme off. But for you go ahead.
;)
;)
replying on bottoms up by suckmychucks
11 Apr 2003, 3:30 AM
I found this to be witty because, unlike your others,this one was quite funny. Maybe its because it is the name works so well, or maybe its just the image of someone drunk falling on their bum. Either way its much more humorish and has an appeal that the other pieces you wrote. Anyway there is clear mental image and a sense of FUN in its inmature nature. Your others lack in that fold.Therefore I deem this piece worthy of reading unlike the others.
;)
;)
on ode to an english teacher by suckmychucks
10 Apr 2003, 5:16 PM
Why all the limericks?? Why must you shame the irish so?
on two flies by suckmychucks
10 Apr 2003, 5:10 PM
Not Very Witty
Not Clever Enough to Be Gay
A horrible piece
I'm forced to say
I wasn't amused in the least little bit
Whining worse than even me
Which is hard I'll admit
A zero I'm afraid it has to be
Thats all you get
Not Clever Enough to Be Gay
A horrible piece
I'm forced to say
I wasn't amused in the least little bit
Whining worse than even me
Which is hard I'll admit
A zero I'm afraid it has to be
Thats all you get