on Looking down by INTRANSIT
7 Aug 2003, 11:41 PM
Okay, I'm an idiot 'cuz I don't understand this poem in the least and yet I enjoy these images immensely. If it's not too much of a kick in the nuts, could you please give me a clue about those last four lines?
Reserving my vote. I'm glad I didn't read the version with "indecent proposal" in it.
Reserving my vote. I'm glad I didn't read the version with "indecent proposal" in it.
on Tug of War by dragonfly
7 Aug 2003, 11:30 PM
I think Bedroom Butchershop is so much better just because it's succinct. This is just too much of a rant for me.
on Bedroom Butchershop by dragonfly
7 Aug 2003, 11:23 PM
I know that feeling and it isn't fun.
But, this poem is.
But, this poem is.
on Lethal Weapon by poetandkonwit
2 Aug 2003, 12:43 PM
Pardon my ignorance but, what the hell does "I flatter z" mean? Aside from that it speaks to me.
replying on Malcontent by EAger to Offend
2 Aug 2003, 12:23 PM
George W...Bush? How about "weapons of ass destruction"?
The difference would be that I know it's incorrect. But, don't you think it belongs in the dictionary? It's so much lighter than "uniqueness". I don't know. I need suggestions!!!
The difference would be that I know it's incorrect. But, don't you think it belongs in the dictionary? It's so much lighter than "uniqueness". I don't know. I need suggestions!!!
on A Dreamers Cookery: Cosmic Gardener [edited] by SupremeDreamer
2 Aug 2003, 12:03 PM
Maybe just "Dynomite fishermen wanted" as if in a classified ad. Also, immolation to me implies "sacred".
I love the ending with the plum instead of an apple. A good thinking work here. I'll vote later when my thought is complete.
I love the ending with the plum instead of an apple. A good thinking work here. I'll vote later when my thought is complete.
replying on Malcontent by EAger to Offend
2 Aug 2003, 11:45 AM
I like to make up my own words if they fit my rhyme or rythm better than the real ones - particularly if I figure that they are decipherable.
incestors - those who act on incest (sorry 'bout the type-o)
uniquity- just sounds better than "uniqueness"
Thanx for the 10. This is old and I used to be more brash.
incestors - those who act on incest (sorry 'bout the type-o)
uniquity- just sounds better than "uniqueness"
Thanx for the 10. This is old and I used to be more brash.
on Kakistocracy by <{Baba^Yaga}>
25 Jul 2003, 1:57 PM
This is hot shit!
on null by Bill Z Bub
23 Jul 2003, 5:12 PM
Ah, cat-tails. the ultimate phalic symbol.
It was clearly the sister following in July's footsteps.
It was clearly the sister following in July's footsteps.
on Can you believe this piece of shit was #1? by horus8
23 Jul 2003, 4:56 PM
Take comfort that the truth is far sweeter than any place on the best list. I'm hoping so, anyway.
on Voluptuous, Blonde Bird-Woman by http://mulberryfairy
23 Jul 2003, 4:43 PM
I don't believe that I have read a more vivid poem on this site! I almost gave this an 8 just to save the bell-curve but, upon re-reading it I don't honestly think it can be improved.
So, here's your 10. Thanx for making my day!
So, here's your 10. Thanx for making my day!
on You wouldn't know God from Adam by horus8
20 Jul 2003, 10:46 AM
Is he really a "diluted twit", or was that deluded? Also, I think "sounded like a ten year old child" would be better in the present tense. I can't really rank it as is but, perhaps after a good edit.
Cheers!
Cheers!
on I've lost my poetic edge by thepinkbunnyofdoom
19 Jul 2003, 11:34 AM
It might be scarey. But, it might be better, too. I don't believe in the myth that an artist has to be in pain to do good work. That is what our memory is for.
Take a 7 for reminding me of how terrifying it is to grow up and how much better I am for having done it!
Take a 7 for reminding me of how terrifying it is to grow up and how much better I am for having done it!
on Mistaken Paradise by DJCARTER
19 Jul 2003, 9:38 AM
This has missed my heart altogether.
on Goodbye by Sunshine Conkey
18 Jul 2003, 2:14 PM
I'm sorry, but I just can't see through the sap. You can probably get a job with Hallmark, though. The sentiment is worthy of pursuit and I don't doubt that it comes from the heart. Just not my cup o' tea.
on rainday by Bill Z Bub
17 Jul 2003, 7:49 AM
Survivalling on is nice. No, it's right. I'd not edit this anymore as it seems to be sensibly nonsensicle. 9
When the smelts are running the rivers really are silver though I could see if you didn't want to overplay the s sound.
E minor doesn't have to be a chord, it could be a key, which I think is how you meant it. Try "the trombones minor key" as most people wouldn't know E from F to hear it, but could recognize Major from minor.