on If God Was a Nihilist by baughworm
19 Feb 2005, 10:24 AM
nihilist: someone who rejects all theories of morality or religious belief
on The Hell With Growing Up by wilco
31 Mar 2004, 2:42 PM
how old are you that you have wasted away to such a tremendous degree?
on matador by ThePariahDog
31 Mar 2004, 2:32 PM
too wordy for my tastes.
on A wicked rose grows in God's grapevine. by SupremeDreamer
31 Mar 2004, 2:30 PM
Some of your references seem a little to cliche. The wind always whispers and caresses. Everyone's spirit has a beast. Try some different language. Especially the first line. It was a bit of a turn off. The end was much better.
on Over Simplification by Richard
31 Mar 2004, 2:26 PM
I agree. It needs more work, but good start
on Janine (a set of haikus) by capachijim
15 Jun 2003, 11:43 PM
put away the thesaurus
on Jellybean Land by JoyLuck
15 Jun 2003, 11:34 PM
are you 11 years old or some sort of super genius writing to fuck with the minds of the inferior?
on The Drunkest ever by horus8
9 Jun 2003, 10:04 PM
but ?UNFORTUNATLEY? I can't remember
who in the hell you are anyway.
it sounds as though its more fortunate than not.
Otherwise I love this poem. VERY real. Great work.
who in the hell you are anyway.
it sounds as though its more fortunate than not.
Otherwise I love this poem. VERY real. Great work.
replying on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm
9 Jun 2003, 9:54 PM
I didn't mean straddling, but simply the mechanical rocking motion of the horse. I used the horse because it has that straddling associated with it, but more directly I was only going for the actual rocking motion.
Thanks
Thanks
replying on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm
7 Jun 2003, 3:20 PM
Thank you
replying on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm
7 Jun 2003, 12:36 PM
I didn't mean for it to be a kid, but keyhole seemed to fit better than any other way of catching your lover cheating on you. If you can give any ideas i would appreciate it.
on Life's Loves Lost by Jigg
23 May 2003, 3:35 PM
The language is in need of some maturing, but the ending is good. Still needs work, but moving along.
on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america
20 May 2003, 9:37 PM
beautifully written
on Over beast by Crakyamuni
20 May 2003, 9:34 PM
very young sounding
on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
20 May 2003, 9:33 PM
heading towards something great
on great caesar's ghost by bondjedi
20 May 2003, 9:32 PM
That is terrible, but then again...6
on Bitter Breakfast by nugit15
19 May 2003, 5:43 AM
when there "were" words?