poemranker ::20 most recent comments by <~> (721-740)

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on some deleted poem 28 Dec 2002, 12:48 AM
hey p&k, is he saying that stan rice was the marquis de sade? (i don't speak portugese)
on some deleted poem 2 Jan 2003, 11:40 AM
to hard a try at similie in those first few lines. good thought, but you've grown since you wrote it, so why not revise?
on some deleted poem 28 Dec 2002, 8:19 AM
better. the last stanza--actually, the first line of it--it's leaden. the rest of it steps so rapidly, so lightly.
on some deleted poem 30 Dec 2002, 1:38 PM
caducus--i think you mean 'breath bated'--as in the shortened form of 'abated'--unless there was chum involved...
on Kernel by anitawit 2 Jan 2003, 11:37 AM
can you refine those last 3 lines--make them a little denser, more toward the kernel, if you will?

good idea.
on what is he doing?? by xanthippe 28 Dec 2002, 12:10 AM
second to last line: "let's choose"
you need the apostrophe.
and that's about it.

how do i describe this poem?

pure. willing. complete.
on some deleted poem 29 Dec 2002, 7:39 PM
what, no bears???

GO BEARS!!!
on some deleted poem 2 Jan 2003, 9:00 PM
even better than before. you honed it.
on some deleted poem 2 Jan 2003, 11:39 AM
how does the title relate?
on Rant by blkarak 1 Jan 2003, 6:42 PM
dylanesque.
on Star Wars theme by Myte342 1 Jan 2003, 7:13 PM
these aren't the droids we're looking for.
on some deleted poem 1 Jan 2003, 7:14 PM
take it someplace, now that you have a lift
on some deleted poem 31 Dec 2002, 1:13 PM
i guess you won't be needing that barbeque sauce i sent you then. damn!

happy new year, -=Dark_Angel=- !
on Blues by Christof 30 Dec 2002, 11:39 AM
this is so...well, literal. for you, especially.
on some deleted poem 29 Dec 2002, 5:26 PM
hah! even better than a triangle!
on A Short Letter by Ranger 28 Dec 2002, 12:07 AM
no way. they seem smooth at night. in the morning is when you brainsmack yourself and groan, jeez, what was i thinkin'?
you were drinkin' not thinkin', my friend.
that being said, this is sweetly done.
on Knowledge of Porridge by Sonic Tonic 29 Dec 2002, 7:38 PM
GO BEARS!!!
on some deleted poem 28 Dec 2002, 8:21 AM
oh heironymus, this is lovely!
on some deleted poem 29 Dec 2002, 7:39 PM
GO BEARS!!!
on some deleted poem 29 Dec 2002, 6:58 PM
i seem to remember liking it better before. what has changed?