on Pauling in Disguise (Ignorance and Arrogance) by Geschäftsreise
25 Sep 2003, 7:21 PM
i c what you mean, sir.
on Ode to the Renesis by INTRANSIT
26 Sep 2003, 12:55 PM
nice one.
on some deleted poem
16 Sep 2003, 11:57 AM
ouchies.
on some deleted poem
8 Sep 2003, 8:10 PM
or at least a half a beer undrunk, unspilt, under the coffee table.
on some deleted poem
8 Sep 2003, 8:09 PM
ditto
on some deleted poem
17 Sep 2003, 8:18 AM
hmm. good, but the rhythm needs work.
on The Killing Festival Anthem by William Delacroix
15 Sep 2003, 11:23 AM
my NEH-EH-AME is z, and this ain't me.
on Inner-city parish by richa
18 Sep 2003, 8:53 AM
nice job.
on some deleted poem
17 Sep 2003, 12:37 AM
sweet, tint.
'To dive below and find for you
The perfect pearl within a parted life'
damn. nice job.
i disagree with jbh abot the opak reference--i think it does, as you intended, imply their differences.
i'll come read it again in the morning. but, damn, this is fine.
'To dive below and find for you
The perfect pearl within a parted life'
damn. nice job.
i disagree with jbh abot the opak reference--i think it does, as you intended, imply their differences.
i'll come read it again in the morning. but, damn, this is fine.
on naive gazer by richa
16 Sep 2003, 11:58 AM
richa!! give me verb, oh please, oh please:
"And if he should swap his stars with words,
his eyes for a mouth
as pale as a painted stage-prop lantern."
"And if he should swap his stars with words,
his eyes for a mouth
as pale as a painted stage-prop lantern."
on some deleted poem
8 Sep 2003, 8:09 PM
it's too bad you descend so completely into cliche. you have something. you just don't really expore it. too bad.
on canto di desiderio by Bill Z Bub
8 Sep 2003, 10:17 PM
ah, bill! i wish i could hear you speak this.
on some deleted poem
20 Sep 2003, 3:44 PM
ah, margaret. i wish you the best in your future. i am sure you reach people, out there. but knowing your audience is the best way to do it. poemranker is not the audience you were after. we floss with barbed wire, round here.
be well, margaret, and may you find what you are looking for.
z
be well, margaret, and may you find what you are looking for.
z
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2003, 7:10 PM
well, no wonder he didn't swallow! his bounce is all off-beat.
(ouch.)
(ouch.)
on >~{In the Shadow of a Crooked Ceiling}~< by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
25 Sep 2003, 6:52 PM
bravo!
it is refreshing to see that some of the rankers are making use of the more modern conventions.
a fine prose-pome indeed, sirrah!
-2 for cerical (sic) errors.
it is refreshing to see that some of the rankers are making use of the more modern conventions.
a fine prose-pome indeed, sirrah!
-2 for cerical (sic) errors.
on (fragment) by razorgrin
25 Sep 2003, 6:57 PM
wound copper. tricksy, he is. he watches us, yess, he does.
on some deleted poem
25 Sep 2003, 7:09 PM
that last line's a sucker punch, richa.
it does not feel like it is yours to write.
if this is your new voice, grow into it in the prior 7 lines. (but i rather prefer the first 7 to the 8th.)
it does not feel like it is yours to write.
if this is your new voice, grow into it in the prior 7 lines. (but i rather prefer the first 7 to the 8th.)
on Wasted Words by ho_hum
26 Sep 2003, 7:10 AM
you, sir, have wasted your commas, as well.
but you turned a nice trick with the similie.
but you turned a nice trick with the similie.
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2003, 12:53 PM
what about on the wall? under the table? ON THE FURNITURE!!!!
come to your senses, man!!!
come to your senses, man!!!
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2003, 12:54 PM
where is the alcohol? this was all accomplished without a crutch?