on The Bunny, The Wench, and The Troll by Billy Fights
8 Aug 2003, 6:03 PM
Nice, but now who exactly is this directed at? eh? 9.
on Stalker by OnTheOtherHand
8 Aug 2003, 6:05 PM
Nothing like women to inspire a poets pen to write.. nice. 9.
on Fresh faced Danger-Teen by INTRANSIT
8 Aug 2003, 6:19 PM
Fucking good.. i really like this poem. 10.
on Perfection by justjay
2 Aug 2003, 1:58 PM
cherry on top of a well iced cake..
wheres the meat? heh. 8.
wheres the meat? heh. 8.
on some deleted poem
10 Aug 2003, 7:43 PM
HAIRY!!!! OMG ITS A GORILLA! heh. 8.
on Three Brothers by EAger to Offend
8 Aug 2003, 5:37 PM
not bad, not bad. Doesn't get my blood boilin though. blessed with 8.
on Memory by Hostileintent
8 Aug 2003, 6:07 PM
well written. 8
on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe
8 Aug 2003, 2:26 PM
Nice note about "The bottom just sounds copied and forced to be something it doesn't want to be."
"The lake of tears slap"
Lake of tears? can you use some like... imagination?
the top can never be what it wants to be, even at the top, due to it being fattened with worthless cliche crap like that.
"Alone it stands,"
my god.. yeah, that really was an original way to see it.. this needs some style..
looks like it should be titled:
A Poet Weeping on a Pillow...
Stop whining, god thats fucking boring.. skull fuck me to death amazing, i almost blinked.. but no.
I passed out, and i was on meth.. no offense, just my lil ole opinion..
Other than that, its worth an 8, so thats your blessing.
go in peace..
"The lake of tears slap"
Lake of tears? can you use some like... imagination?
the top can never be what it wants to be, even at the top, due to it being fattened with worthless cliche crap like that.
"Alone it stands,"
my god.. yeah, that really was an original way to see it.. this needs some style..
looks like it should be titled:
A Poet Weeping on a Pillow...
Stop whining, god thats fucking boring.. skull fuck me to death amazing, i almost blinked.. but no.
I passed out, and i was on meth.. no offense, just my lil ole opinion..
Other than that, its worth an 8, so thats your blessing.
go in peace..
on American Eden by Don-Quixote
4 Aug 2003, 1:34 PM
hey.. thanks everyone for the corrections and such, including suggestions and grammar notations.. very helpful.
on My own Truism by Billy Fights
5 Aug 2003, 2:11 AM
cmon.. this is like, what, a fourth grade poem? 4.
on Satyrs and fluting the teachers by Jeremi B. Handrinos
4 Aug 2003, 3:15 PM
lol.. nice. hey, btw are you going to point me to the url of that manly p hall essay or what? I mean, i hate being teased and cheated out of an interesting read.
on Moosefart's Revenge by wwFrasier Allonbyww
4 Aug 2003, 2:20 PM
"They even planned my funeral."
Jesus christ you stupid bitch, didn't i tell you before that me and horus didnt plan it, it was simply a sudden thing that HAPPENED.
Fucking crazy whore acts as if it was a godforsakened conspiracy to destroy her bipolar dynasty..
Jesus christ you stupid bitch, didn't i tell you before that me and horus didnt plan it, it was simply a sudden thing that HAPPENED.
Fucking crazy whore acts as if it was a godforsakened conspiracy to destroy her bipolar dynasty..
on Parades for cripples (Shit bag) by Thome Plumpe by Bachus
3 Aug 2003, 3:24 PM
LMAO.. btw, nice going with the repetition of the plum.. but it cant cure everyone man.. some people are just too thick for the fruits medicine to sink in. 10
on My Single Hatred by cleverdevice
3 Aug 2003, 3:26 PM
yeah.. i cant stand any insects myself. 8
on I Can See the Sunset in Her Eyes by justjay
2 Aug 2003, 2:00 PM
Let me tell you, when your super dreamin a girlfriend, thats the sign that youve gone too far and need a super large dose of reality.. ;) go out get some pussy.
on Grampa Morris by http://bandgeek
2 Aug 2003, 11:55 PM
well done. blessed with 10.
on some deleted poem
3 Aug 2003, 4:10 AM
jesus christ, i realize that no one knows what a masterpiece is.. this poor thing littered with the low scores of morons who fail to realize the power of these words.. i feel like an idiot not having discovered this godforsakened diamond, i can now say i lived a privileged life.. where else can i read more of your work? eh? im addicted, i want more, your the opium den of my universe. 10. 10. 20. fuck the scale.
on How we found Jesus by Jeremi B. Handrinos
10 Aug 2003, 8:59 PM
lmao. so when are you going to write a book? ;P 10
on some deleted poem
9 Aug 2003, 9:13 AM
I enjoyed this piece. 9.
on Musings: Willow Sculpture by SupremeDreamer
9 Aug 2003, 3:14 PM
*sigh*... im quite happy with this one.. of course, please do point out any problems etc, that i didnt see, this one i want to perfect till it stands solid, unmovable. :)