poemranker ::20 most recent comments by nentwined (401-420) and replies

Comments bynentwined, 401–420 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on She washed over me by nentwined 19 Sep 2004, 10:48 PM
Thank you.

Much work it needs, but you give hope. :)
on Easier To Say Good-bye by Brandy_n_Cali 7 Sep 2004, 8:32 PM
a little less pretension could help this.
on Winters Death by Brandy_n_Cali 7 Sep 2004, 8:31 PM
odd. I think better than a lot of your stuff simply through obfuscation and length.
on Anthony & Kimberly by Brandy_n_Cali 7 Sep 2004, 8:29 PM
double meh.
replying on Devil's Palm by Brandy_n_Cali 7 Sep 2004, 8:28 PM
ditto, ish, though workable is debatable.
on ~YOUR TURN~ by Brandy_n_Cali 7 Sep 2004, 8:26 PM
a rambling rant, awkward flow, nothing new. try painting the picture of the person and situation that is causing these words to spew forth. make us feel the words instead of just throwing them out.
replying on ~Frosty~ by Brandy_n_Cali 7 Sep 2004, 8:22 PM
b3cuz th3y hur+!
on Love Lie's In Misery by Brandy_n_Cali 7 Sep 2004, 8:19 PM
please, please, please learn how to pluralize words and what apostrophes are for!

flow is awkward, concept overdone without anything to really sell it. why free verse with random line breaks when you go to such trouble to rhyme every "sentence"?
on abortion by darylchew 30 Aug 2004, 12:52 PM
awfully preachy. over-described.
on We are what we hold by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:36 PM
agree. not bad, not good. though perhaps you've spoiled me now on other poems of yours.
on A friendly conversation with a Native American by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:32 PM
I like it except for the one syllable of "Yeah" towards the end. Well, maybe the last three lines are a bit off for me. I think it works better without, though the tie-back to buffalo is nice.
on we can't walk forever by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:31 PM
you can. you can walk forever.
on metaphorically speaking by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:30 PM
evocative.
on TRUTH by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:29 PM
hilarious. :)
on My Soul is Stopping by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:28 PM
nice. -10-
on it's all quite obviously one big joke by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:27 PM
I really like the flow of this. Bits meander too much for me, but I like it.
on My chair by somemorepoetry 27 Aug 2004, 3:26 PM
I like it, though I do not get the _need_, which seems important to the piece as a whole.
replying on A Piñon Planter by Dovina 27 Aug 2004, 3:24 PM
mmhmm.
replying on Countervail by D. $ Fontera 27 Aug 2004, 3:03 PM
still not getting a coherent moment/story/thing. but thanks. :)
on solitude by darylchew 27 Aug 2004, 2:58 PM
amazingly cliche. a nearly perfect pimple.