on J.F.K. by thing1
8 Apr 2004, 4:55 PM
I don't understand this at all, especially the ending and the title. The flow is smooth, the descriptions decent, but the content has passed me by.
on La théologie pour les Politiciens by wilco
8 Apr 2004, 4:44 PM
hilarious. some of them are definitely weaker than others (#2, #4, #5). But, you know, just hilarious. :)
replying on A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom
8 Apr 2004, 4:42 PM
er. divits -> divots. sorry. :)
on A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom
8 Apr 2004, 4:40 PM
divits -> divets
through out -> throughout
I like the idea, less so the execution. With four lines, the second is awkward and the fourth is just a tongue twister.
through out -> throughout
I like the idea, less so the execution. With four lines, the second is awkward and the fourth is just a tongue twister.
on Polyester Mustache by Bachus
8 Apr 2004, 4:32 PM
boring?
replying on ritual of now intensified by nentwined
8 Apr 2004, 4:08 PM
Hmm. On that note, maybe I really should attempt to integrate a spellcheck on the preview pane. Doh re: manna. I knew that, really. But. La. :)
third coffee poem today!? It's my first coffee in a week. :) And I think my second poem about hot liquids sold over the counter. But. Cool beans, and thanks. :)
third coffee poem today!? It's my first coffee in a week. :) And I think my second poem about hot liquids sold over the counter. But. Cool beans, and thanks. :)
replying on ritual of now intensified by nentwined
8 Apr 2004, 4:06 PM
mmm, donuts =)
replying on ritual of now intensified by nentwined
8 Apr 2004, 3:41 PM
I shared this comment with all my co-workers. I think you made my day, even with the 7. :)
replying on ritual of now intensified by nentwined
8 Apr 2004, 3:41 PM
Thanks. :)
on Woman in the purple cotton jacket(repaired) by INTRANSIT
6 Mar 2004, 11:41 AM
Odd. The conversation makes a bit more sense of it. But odd. I think I want more about the elderly couple, their interaction with her (if they were there with her, or if they just were all sitting at the same table). How old is she?
Hmm.
Hmm.
replying on paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined
2 Mar 2004, 12:15 PM
spiff. :)
replying on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined
8 Jan 2004, 9:25 AM
Beakariffic. :)
replying on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined
7 Jan 2004, 5:53 PM
but the rest of them do?
it's trying to force the examination of breakbeat time vs. breakbeat time travel vs. time travel. ish.
it's trying to force the examination of breakbeat time vs. breakbeat time travel vs. time travel. ish.
replying on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined
7 Jan 2004, 9:07 AM
Goal? I'm supposed to have a goal?
No, I suppose funny wasn't the goal. The goal was to write something, anything, no matter how crappy it was, because my mind was for some reason unable to function around two cups of coffee. A very odd experience.
No, I suppose funny wasn't the goal. The goal was to write something, anything, no matter how crappy it was, because my mind was for some reason unable to function around two cups of coffee. A very odd experience.
replying on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined
7 Jan 2004, 8:49 AM
cute, very cute. :)
I do seem to like that word, though. Certainly not the first poem I've overused it.
I do seem to like that word, though. Certainly not the first poem I've overused it.
replying on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined
7 Jan 2004, 8:47 AM
here goes nothing. ;) That lets me fix the title and one spot where I had a double space for no reason other than twitchy fingers.
replying on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined
7 Jan 2004, 8:11 AM
yeah, the last line sucks. I couldn't figure out how to end it. Any suggestion? Or just fine without the last line and nothing else?