replying on BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined
7 Jan 2004, 8:08 AM
I've had a few pieces in print, but overall no. still working on it.
on Sonnet Eighteen by devilishnutcase
7 Jan 2004, 12:39 AM
what crack _are_ you smoking? or whose?
replying on Fuck by devilishnutcase
7 Jan 2004, 12:38 AM
uh... you just go and enjoy it, and try not to get it all over poemranker again, kay? thanks.
on Fuck by devilishnutcase
6 Jan 2004, 10:46 PM
certainly a lot of fuck. repetition is annoying, forced rhymes hurt, painfully cliched, couldn't find any sort of flow or rhythm... this should be 'pimple poem' instead of 'free verse'.
fuck?
fuck?
on Don't Care by LuV_jOhNnY
6 Jan 2004, 4:58 PM
Catchy, yet says nothing. I can't say I like it.
on Holding on for Jesus by Everyone
11 Dec 2003, 7:47 AM
For sarcasm, this is pretty fun.
replying on my hunger has become a hunger for revenge by nentwined
3 Dec 2003, 12:16 PM
Then I think I accomplished what I was going for. :)
replying on paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined
14 Nov 2003, 2:53 PM
Umm.
Actually.
I'm not.
Actually.
I'm not.
on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
12 Nov 2003, 6:04 AM
:studies line 4 carefully:
thank you.
Dribble didn't throw you? ((there's movement for the b's to be replaced by z's))
thank you.
Dribble didn't throw you? ((there's movement for the b's to be replaced by z's))
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 4:53 PM
to drop the syllables in l2 to match the last?
I'll ponder it. I admit the beauty is probably the weakest line. But I like its flow.
I'll ponder it. I admit the beauty is probably the weakest line. But I like its flow.
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 4:31 PM
what would you replace rhyme with?
and I'm leaning towards not using dribble; thoughts on that? there's a suggestion above... trickle. Which I like worse. I'm thinking... hmm. No, maybe I am thinking dribble. I need a thesaurus. ;)
[[thesaurus.com:
distill, drip, drivel, drizzle, drool, drop, leak, ooze, run, salivate, seep, slaver, slobber, spout, squirt, trill, weep
]]
hmm. I kinda like weep. DRIZZLE. Yes. I think v2 will be drizzle. ;)
and I'm leaning towards not using dribble; thoughts on that? there's a suggestion above... trickle. Which I like worse. I'm thinking... hmm. No, maybe I am thinking dribble. I need a thesaurus. ;)
[[thesaurus.com:
distill, drip, drivel, drizzle, drool, drop, leak, ooze, run, salivate, seep, slaver, slobber, spout, squirt, trill, weep
]]
hmm. I kinda like weep. DRIZZLE. Yes. I think v2 will be drizzle. ;)
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 4:31 PM
Hmm. There are many poets here, and despite all the flattery I don't. Eh. Nice to meet you, in any case. But, I was going to say--there are many poets here, some of them are just very good at hiding. And they do tend to be overwhelmed by folks who think they are poets. Who are in turn overwhelmed by those that poke fun at anything. Some of whom are poets. And some of whom think they are poets. And there are overlaps all about.
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 12:30 PM
oh, erm, why, thank you, then. :)
I'm honestly amazed by the votes it's getting.
It's the middle stanza of something that didn't really work right (imo), though the full thing is getting kudos also, elsewhere. I'm really having to wonder if people are just being nice to me.
http://www.livejournal.com/community/100
I'm honestly amazed by the votes it's getting.
It's the middle stanza of something that didn't really work right (imo), though the full thing is getting kudos also, elsewhere. I'm really having to wonder if people are just being nice to me.
http://www.livejournal.com/community/100
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 5:59 AM
Hmm. Yes. Confused is.
sorry. (it's what one gets at a poem a day)
sorry. (it's what one gets at a poem a day)
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 5:58 AM
mind time doubt rhyme, drought dribble. :)
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 5:58 AM
I knew (knew?) that it was bad, but y'all are confusing me like no other. picture give rhyme dribble!
replying on comment-ary by nentwined
28 Oct 2003, 8:12 AM
thank you very much. :)
replying on comment-ary by nentwined
28 Oct 2003, 8:11 AM
could be. but one never knows. I'd like to think the poem is more general than that, but certainly encapsulates the ranker. a human tendency, more.
one moment and I'll fix that. I'm just not sure which one (moment). la. ;)