on Uncontrolled scribblings one luch break by Nicholas Jones
9 Jan 2006, 7:36 PM
I didn't get this use of "retain"
False snow on an allotment to retain, perhaps
or to retain warmth
sorry for being so traditionalist, but the "+" and the date were eyesores
it was good in spite of all that.
False snow on an allotment to retain, perhaps
or to retain warmth
sorry for being so traditionalist, but the "+" and the date were eyesores
it was good in spite of all that.
on [] by Prince of Void
9 Jan 2006, 7:32 PM
why not spell out p.o.v.- we had to scroll to the right anyway for the honking last line
on The Dark Days of Aristotle by somemorepoetry
9 Jan 2006, 7:26 PM
nice plot twist
on Birmingham gardens by INTRANSIT
9 Jan 2006, 7:22 PM
2nd to last line- sun's
These are excellent. It IS good to be like moss.
Are you still in transit? How do you find time to write so much? Do you drive around with a phrase in your head all day until you get to take a break, then scramble to get it on paper?
These are excellent. It IS good to be like moss.
Are you still in transit? How do you find time to write so much? Do you drive around with a phrase in your head all day until you get to take a break, then scramble to get it on paper?
on We'll be right back after these messages by INTRANSIT
8 Jan 2006, 6:18 PM
when will you obey?
replying on Pledge by http://mulberryfairy
8 Jan 2006, 6:14 PM
Alas, I am the asker- a social worker, no less.
on The Healing Species by Dovina
8 Jan 2006, 6:52 AM
intelligent, relevant, and well written
on Toasting To Our Wedding Night by Beyond_Dreams
8 Jan 2006, 6:50 AM
I almost didn't read because of the title, but it was worth it (both your choice of title and the read).
on a love not meant to be by nentwined
29 Jul 2005, 10:45 PM
nice job- you really captured the simultaneous hope and awareness of flaws that we bring to relationships
on Requiem by ChaseValentine
30 Apr 2005, 3:22 PM
Beautiful and full of resolve.
on Sins of convenience by sunset sky
30 Apr 2005, 3:18 PM
I liked it all, including last stanza.
on Walking Out by NoSage
30 Apr 2005, 3:12 PM
submit this to an NA meditation book
replying on Untitled by http://mulberryfairy
30 Apr 2005, 3:09 PM
Thanks. I don't want to narrow it down that much, because I am trying to convey this undercurrent of conception/life/birth here, too. Did it come through at all?
replying on Untitled by http://mulberryfairy
28 Apr 2005, 8:29 PM
Luckily, in Maine, we have domestic partner benefits, regardless.
on Prayer For The Church by sliver
28 Apr 2005, 8:27 PM
What's outrageous?
Papal praise is
What's disgusting?
Condom bustin'
What's outrageous?
Celebate priests is
What's forbidden?
alter boy smitten
What do we want?
Condoms!
When do we want 'em?
Now!
Papal praise is
What's disgusting?
Condom bustin'
What's outrageous?
Celebate priests is
What's forbidden?
alter boy smitten
What do we want?
Condoms!
When do we want 'em?
Now!
on Lost key for a hall-closet by zodiac
28 Apr 2005, 8:09 PM
Loved this part "Then she's tucked, like laundry wearing rumpled laundry,
in the old crotchless, scallops..."
I got the sexual undertone, though not the way you intended it; I was thinking the key was a metaphor for some masturbation tool at the end.
in the old crotchless, scallops..."
I got the sexual undertone, though not the way you intended it; I was thinking the key was a metaphor for some masturbation tool at the end.
on Fingers Are Soldiers by somemorepoetry
28 Apr 2005, 7:59 PM
fine writing
replying on Untitled by http://mulberryfairy
28 Apr 2005, 7:56 PM
I don't take sides.
I like the lightness and how you play it with the
reality that it is serious and painful, too.