on Secret, Admirer by <~>
20 Aug 2002, 3:04 PM
Sometimes, even if you assemble words beautifully you don't always get a solid result. There's nothing "wrong" with this piece, but it just didn't "hit" me, as much of your other work has. Perhaps there's an over indulgence in ambiguous imagery and a shortfall of plain story telling. Guess that's just my taste. 7. (Against your other submissions).
on Every other weekend by Corey McHattan
19 Aug 2002, 12:00 PM
I'm sure this brings back not so pleasant childhood memories for a lot of people. Evocative and honest.8.
on Summer Son by Frass
16 Aug 2002, 3:14 PM
How can i like this poem so much when i don't understand a word of it? I'm just a sucker for the sun. Hell, it cheered me up. But i sense an underlying melancholy. 8.
on cold sonnet by <~>
16 Aug 2002, 3:09 PM
Needed to review your poem with lowest average to console myself. But, alas, this is rather good too. Almost too much imagery though. Slightly tiring to read. 6.
on To You, In Warmer Climes by <~>
16 Aug 2002, 3:04 PM
Quite excellent. Particulary liked line "sun is in your blood". Beautiful work, will review your others. Last verse excellently structured, short and sweet, a fitting epilogue. Have a ten from the UK.
on Exquisite Explosion by Venus
16 Aug 2002, 2:56 PM
I don't know why i like this but i do. Probably the aquamarine architrave. Good word choice. I read this as a coming thunderstorm. (But may be wrong).8.
on The plains of Africa by horus8
16 Aug 2002, 2:47 PM
No. I'm sorry Horus, having reviewed several of your submitions, I am sure you are capable of better writing than this. Borderline poetry, more likely poor prose. Try to concentrate more on the imagery and less on the gratuitous profanity. 1.
on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8
16 Aug 2002, 2:37 PM
Hmmmm...Two nines and a two, seems to be splitting the voters. Beautiful start, particularly enjoyed the juxtaposition of (what i supposed to be) the cool evening on the swing and the fire. Peaceful porch against roaring fire imagery. I'll give that bit the nine. But the political references later left me colder..."United States...". But hey, I'm British. I'll average out at a seven and check your other work.
on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
30 Jul 2002, 10:15 AM
Not big, not clever, not entertaining. Controversial is one thing, poor poetry another.