first of all, thanks for the comments.

second,i like it.it is, what seems to me, to be quite nostalgic.i duno, i have always had a thing for personal and nostalgic poetry,and this fits in here.very well written. 10

a work of art.lessson for us all.

i like the imagery.i like the way that you touch on the awkwardness, i suppose i could compare to the feeling to W.B.Yeats's poem 'Twice Shy'? know it? 9

we all know the feeling.personal,i like personal.i like poems of reality not made up bullshit unrequited(spelling) love and stuff.like i said,i like it. 10

question:i'm new to this place,and a young writer.i've already asked some other people to look at my poems,and i'd appreciate it if you could give me your response to them.

yea. i put this poem in last year in a competition.got to the semi. when in school i studied the work of Gerard Manley Hopkins. i loved him,and his so many unique styles. i just took one, which as you said is, splitting the line up into two,and putting the first part last.thanks for the comments

thanks for the comments and support everybody.much appreciated.

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never thought of translating it sorry. here is the translation for the last two stanzas:

Yes.Sport is extremely important
Perhaps it's the most important
But the don't put an emphasis,on sport as a whole
What about free development, Nothing

I now understand the life of the teenager
I see it's full of filthy dirty injustice
But overall- Saint Munchins College has brought
Me to a man from a naive teenager
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the sport refers to the fact that my school always prided itself on its sport,but the fact is that it is a rugby school.rugby only.other sport is shunned.so i say 'how can one develop freely'

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a real thought provoker.i like it.my type of poem.keep it up

question:any chance you could look at two of my poems?'Memory' and 'Incomplete'?i would really appreciate it

good use of imagery and emotion.creates a nice scene in the mind.i like it.

question:any chance you could review 2 of my peoms? 'Memory' and 'Incomplete'? i would really appreciate it

I like it.Very symbolic.

question:any chance you could look and review mine, the last two on my list?

supreme. i like the feeling in it.the imagery is so vivid.

question:i have asked a few people to look at the last two in my list,would you too?

how is that a poem?

nice 8

i like it

come on, a bit of effort.nice imagery, but it could be much better