on some deleted poem
24 Feb 2004, 8:25 AM
nicely done.
on Good King Brownceslas by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
25 Feb 2004, 10:05 AM
Thank you for including the link to the tune - I was struggling to amermer it.
crap - the link is too busy; will try later.
Christmas is forever improved.
crap - the link is too busy; will try later.
Christmas is forever improved.
on some deleted poem
25 Feb 2004, 8:10 PM
Quite nice (espec. S4) till the last. then I got confuz-ed.
Settle for a nine?
Settle for a nine?
on Dream of a Vanilla Sky by smlink84
27 Feb 2004, 4:24 AM
Quick note - you don't need to put the title in the body as well.
on some deleted poem
27 Feb 2004, 7:22 AM
is quite good, only some slight moments where it sounds a slave to the rhyme.
on The Unholiest Sonnet Ever by horus8
27 Feb 2004, 7:07 PM
where is the unholy part?
Moves along purty well.
Moves along purty well.
on some deleted poem
27 Feb 2004, 7:39 PM
is it the boogie monster??
on Lifes work by richa
27 Feb 2004, 7:43 PM
that last bit - it's visual to be sure, but think I liked the other version?
The squirrel completely freezes the ability for me to look around and consider the setting for me, and that image is what I'm left with. If that was the intent then kudos, but its quite a departure from the previous version.
The squirrel completely freezes the ability for me to look around and consider the setting for me, and that image is what I'm left with. If that was the intent then kudos, but its quite a departure from the previous version.
on The Worst First by MacFrantic
27 Feb 2004, 7:45 PM
Sorry, but it just seems like a rhyming exercise; I think most of us here, yourself included, could probably do one of these every 12 minutes.
on some deleted poem
27 Feb 2004, 7:47 PM
This line:
"It dies now dies into sleep. " - is good.
The rest - there are so many ways this is said, and the way you have here is about half of them.
"It dies now dies into sleep. " - is good.
The rest - there are so many ways this is said, and the way you have here is about half of them.
on Life by NobodysSon
27 Feb 2004, 7:50 PM
I'm thinking this works, but I almost got tripped up about 2/3rds way in; maybe could be trimmed a bit?
I really wish it was something beside the word LIFE at the end.
I really wish it was something beside the word LIFE at the end.
on beef flavored ramen by ThePariahDog
27 Feb 2004, 7:53 PM
good observations, well put.
on Little Tounge by Figure 8
28 Feb 2004, 7:35 AM
rename it with someting to do with fire and you'll almost have something.
or a dragon. and add another stanza.
btw, "mouth" (as you spell it) should be "muthge"
or a dragon. and add another stanza.
btw, "mouth" (as you spell it) should be "muthge"
on simply missing by daggatolar
28 Feb 2004, 4:09 PM
I really like this:
"Who is after me
My own me after me"
lots of originality here.
"Who is after me
My own me after me"
lots of originality here.
on some deleted poem
28 Feb 2004, 4:54 PM
summer approaches
celebrate with poetry -
but this is a list.
Okay, it is a good list though - what does the last one mean?
celebrate with poetry -
but this is a list.
Okay, it is a good list though - what does the last one mean?
on some deleted poem
29 Feb 2004, 10:07 AM
shocking, actually.
on The Ghost of Sarah Gyllenhall by wilco
29 Feb 2004, 10:11 AM
works for me.
on terraza pizza by daniella
29 Feb 2004, 5:23 PM
You didn't like the kitten?? What was wrong with the cute kitty?