on Las Gaviotas by Bachus
28 Apr 2005, 8:39 PM
I hate to admit I like this, but I do.
replying on Paid In Full by NoSage
16 Jun 2004, 7:37 PM
Hmm, didn't even think of that. Just thinking about him.
on Highschool in My Head by MacFrantic
10 May 2004, 9:19 PM
Oh yes, I'm sure you'll go far. Don't drop the glasses.
on Small made Large by tadpole
27 Nov 2003, 9:04 PM
Well, I wish I had the energy to experience that pain.
on Holding on for Jesus by Everyone
27 Nov 2003, 8:32 PM
You know man, Salvation isn't easy. I hope you have the strength to hold on, it's a rough ride, and everyone seems to want to pull you off.
on 0 by MacFrantic
27 Nov 2003, 8:26 PM
My my, aren't we full of ourselves?
on Mirror to Mirror by Roisin
12 Nov 2003, 7:38 PM
Yea, that'll show'er. well spoken, I wish I had read it before the edit, so I'd know how you've spread it
on Mingy by willosh salkeldosh
12 Nov 2003, 7:16 PM
I guess I need to be somewhere else to understand this. As it is it does nothing for me, but I'm too kind to try that 0, therefore 4.
replying on Giving up on Coke by Katzclear
10 Nov 2003, 6:21 PM
If that were the case I would be in a serious dilemma.
on Giving up on Coke by Katzclear
10 Nov 2003, 5:53 PM
Soda gives you zits, try something else.
on My First Love Proposal by ShaNoN+960317485
10 Nov 2003, 5:45 PM
The rhyme scheme seems to break apart at apparently random intervals. Perhaps intentionally? still, I like the morbidity, it appeals to me.
on submission to decay by FreeFormFixation
10 Nov 2003, 5:17 PM
A good reminder of our mortality, the first line really set the tone, but it confuses my simple mind. Fragments of what skull? still, a well written piece.
on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 5:05 PM
Picture me a poem with the paint of a mind,
give me a beauty that will last through time,
rhyme me a reason to forestall all doubt,
dribble me words to sustain me throughout.
Nothing major, it seems to flow better like this
give me a beauty that will last through time,
rhyme me a reason to forestall all doubt,
dribble me words to sustain me throughout.
Nothing major, it seems to flow better like this
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 4:43 PM
Yes, Sliver has brought me kindof up to date on that, I just found out today that he writes and I was pleasantly surprised with a few of his. What do you think of finishing the poem with /sustain me throughout/then find a way to change L2?
on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 4:16 PM
Very well done. Finally, a poet.I was wondering if I might find one here.
on Waste Of Time by Miggy
10 Nov 2003, 3:48 PM
Not a complete waste of time, you hit on a few good points. Your rhymes sounded a little forced at times, but all in all-not too shabby.
on As I sit alone by baby_d
10 Nov 2003, 3:46 PM
Apostrophe misplaced. I think I see what you were trying to do here. Try again.