on African Killer Bees, it's not the smell of smoke by <{Baba^Yaga}>
21 Oct 2003, 10:58 PM
A ten, blue.
on Kites, Gunpowder, and a Chair by Geschäftsreise
15 Oct 2003, 12:09 PM
Why do I keep believing I might actually find some poetry here?
on salt and celibacy by calliope
15 Oct 2003, 11:56 AM
does a failing libido equal celibacy? Stick to musing.
on SIR FRASER by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
14 Oct 2003, 10:43 AM
Dull
on The spinning infirmary by INTRANSIT
14 Oct 2003, 10:24 AM
Great title. You forgot the question mark. I thoroughly agree with your assesment. I'm constantly being transferred between the pysch. ward and cardiology. Why so brief, these poems of yours?
on Battle of the brains by INTRANSIT
14 Oct 2003, 10:19 AM
I keep waivering between the idea of whether or not this should remain so small, or if you should try to write more stanzas for it? I do like it.
on Note before work by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2003, 10:09 AM
Pretty. Would it be better to remove the last 'and'? I like that you placed 'still' before 'against my skin' instead of the obvious ' memory still fresh'. My mind fights to leave it out there. This way there's the possibilty of it always remaining fresh.
on Birdcalls by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2003, 10:03 AM
One of my favorites. I especially love the way the images seem to come and go, they sort of crumble away, one after the other, and all you leave me with is that ultimate thought. The one we always come back to, the one we cannot shake. Lovely, truly.
on The Red Tree by raysaun
13 Oct 2003, 7:03 PM
in the last stanza change 'saw' to 'felt'. Also snowballs can only be made my people, not trees. Find some other way to say it.
on conundrum, part 1 by poetekzen
13 Oct 2003, 7:01 PM
meandering. clever, but only at first.
on Forever Tired by Antares42
13 Oct 2003, 6:58 PM
Boring
on standing on the dry weeds by silvertongueddevil
13 Oct 2003, 2:15 PM
Worth a good re-edit. You have some worthwhile style, but it's sullied with a kind of irresponsibilty. You settle forless than perfect. Also the last 2 lines must have some serious typos, the grammer is incomperhensible.
on not quite myself by muted_screams
13 Oct 2003, 2:12 PM
you forget to explain
on thanksgiving by kingit
13 Oct 2003, 2:09 PM
Now if you could somehow make more sense with "planets I can live"
replying on thanksgiving by kingit
13 Oct 2003, 1:58 PM
That's the point my dear.
on Colloid by skaskowski
13 Oct 2003, 1:51 PM
This is great. What a wonderful idea.
Alexander The Grape
Little Orphan Orange
Poncho Punch
Strawberry Shortkook
Louie Bloo Raspberry.