on Pleasurable Agony by crims0ngh0st
6 Sep 2002, 9:04 PM
The antithesis of erotica. Who needs Keigels, after reading this my vagina squeezed shut.
on Self by ThoughtfulSoul
6 Sep 2002, 8:53 PM
Things are not quenched for, they are quenched by. Here's a small nugget of wisdom you can take with you on your quest for enlightenment: Many people will incourage you by telling you your poetry is good. They are lying.
on Reality by ThoughtfulSoul
6 Sep 2002, 8:39 PM
Yes, you're right, god is a figment of your torn imagination. So is everything else. Take some serotonin re-uptake inhibitors. You'll feel loads better. Though they might interfere with your so- called talent.
on More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus
6 Sep 2002, 7:56 PM
Perfect. You have left thirsting for more. Someones probably going to whine at you that the 4th has 8 syllables instead of 7, so you might want to change <isn't> to <ain't>. I don't give a fuck, these are perfect for a monologue. The Haiku bandit.
on Ode to writers' block by Roisin
6 Sep 2002, 7:49 PM
poignant.
on Thoughtless Deed by craiggiarc1971
6 Sep 2002, 7:48 PM
Really awful, and pregnant with bad grammaticals.
on Waiting by itchiwitch
6 Sep 2002, 7:42 PM
Remove the last 2 lines. They turn this sappy poem into a late night talk show intro.
on He loves me by susie
5 Sep 2002, 11:42 PM
thisd poem is absolutely beautiful.
on Contra Mundum by psychedelic
5 Sep 2002, 11:04 PM
gate/fate true/blue and of course the ever popular love/above.
on finally found you by webguy
5 Sep 2002, 11:01 PM
Cherry handles?
on Celebration by unknown
5 Sep 2002, 10:51 PM
I don't think Fabio would place his face anywhere near her deep smelling open sex. He might kiss heaving breasts but nothing with the copper taste of blood. Did you have to mention Fabio? Now the whole image is ruined for me.
on Celebration by unknown
5 Sep 2002, 10:46 PM
Yeah it needs some editing, but "copper taste of blood" and "naked scalp breathed cinnamon are first rate. Thanks for your concern Mr. Longfellows, but I am single because I'm not married not because I'm alone.
on Celebration by unknown
5 Sep 2002, 10:22 PM
Wow. There certainly has been alot of erotica coming up on random recently. This is uncomfortably arousing. Well developed ambience. Sight, sound, taste, smell, touch. The last stanza doesn't live up to the others.
on i would have you by silvertongueddevil
5 Sep 2002, 9:43 AM
This is gorgeous. This devil has his charms.
on remembering you by sapphire_rain7
5 Sep 2002, 9:24 AM
"and the willows weep/this cold rain/doesn't wash away" Always good when a middle line pertains to both what preceeds and what proceeds. Sexy poem.
on Birthday Love by Tormentedsoul718
4 Sep 2002, 11:42 PM
Tormentedsoul718, I'd ream you a hole but there's no need for debate. It's plain to see you're an inadequate fake. Go forever pretending that this isn't you, but please straighten your costume, your mask's all askew.
on Lines by OneFingerAnswer
4 Sep 2002, 11:26 PM
Took me a couple of readings to understand. If you make the line break at more, the pause would help comunicate the thought.
on Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit
4 Sep 2002, 6:29 PM
What a sad and beautiful sap. Drunken Romantics, I used to collect them. Your poem makes me lonely for my derelict sock monkey. I admire the way you make him fall apart, right before our very eyes. Be careful Mr., your tender heart is showing.