on Crying Tears with No Home by TLRufener
30 Jun 2005, 3:42 AM
"For someone who has cut his life short."
"It was just his time to move on."
"When it seems that his life just got going."
"He had planned so many times to explore,"
"Or meeting the love of his life."
"Struck down in his prime without a second glance,"
"To fulfill its lifelong dream."
"It was just his time to move on."
"When it seems that his life just got going."
"He had planned so many times to explore,"
"Or meeting the love of his life."
"Struck down in his prime without a second glance,"
"To fulfill its lifelong dream."
on Try Thinking Too by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
30 Jun 2005, 3:39 AM
I've spent the last fifteen minutes thinking about how intelligence may be like a dog with mange. I've got nothing. Sounds cool, though.
on some deleted poem
7 Jul 2005, 2:19 AM
The poem was decent up to "final splat". If you're going to say life is decent up to the final splat, please spare all of us.
on Born and Fed by Dovina
7 Jul 2005, 2:24 AM
"concerns the calf / only for the fun of it," is bumpy. You don't (typically, in any English that's ever existed) concern something for something else in that sense. Unless by concerns you mean 'makes him concerned, worries', and mayhap you do. Anyway, it's kind of like saying "flapping my arms concerns me for feeling like a bird". Do you see what I'm saying?
Otherwise, I enjoyed.
Otherwise, I enjoyed.
on The And women by INTRANSIT
7 Jul 2005, 2:47 AM
I still don't understand the "And" part. I love the title, but the connection is lacking.
on Our Soldiers by Lenore
7 Jul 2005, 2:51 AM
"Their lifeâs the warâs ; sometimes their death is, too!"
Yeah, that kind of follows logically, doesn't it? The rest is decent. Live from the desert. Over and out.
Yeah, that kind of follows logically, doesn't it? The rest is decent. Live from the desert. Over and out.
on A Wider Sky by elderking
7 Jul 2005, 2:52 AM
skies, not skys.
on sad moments by rbooey
7 Jul 2005, 2:53 AM
Good luck to you. Personally, I imagine God being thoroughly Old Testament and all of us getting the fiery poker in the rump.
on some deleted poem
10 Jul 2005, 10:48 PM
The best Islam poem on poemranker today. Did you know Sahib comes from the root word "to pull"? No? Ace!
on London Calling by Bluemonkey
10 Jul 2005, 10:51 PM
"bearded attempts" is great.
on Almost Persuaded by Dovina
10 Jul 2005, 10:03 PM
I don't get the connection between "world spinning" (positive) and "uniformity" (negative). Just a nitpick. You probably meant "spinning" like 'dizzy and disoriented'. That's fine, it's just not the first meaning I got.
Q: Does it take more work to keep an already-spinning world spinning or to stop it? Please include any relevant charts and diagrams in your answer.
PS-Ace rhyme. Really.
Q: Does it take more work to keep an already-spinning world spinning or to stop it? Please include any relevant charts and diagrams in your answer.
PS-Ace rhyme. Really.
on There she is! by CarterTribe
13 Jul 2005, 5:08 AM
Is this a pop song from the early nineties?
on some deleted poem
19 Jul 2005, 12:41 AM
Oh. Why'd you post it here, then?
PS-Reply to comments by clicking on the green 'Reply' button. That's right next to the red 'X' which you already know about.
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on Where did the word "ORIGIN" come from? by T. Jonathron Remp
26 Jul 2005, 1:00 AM
Don't you think the Romans probably knew what the word meant? And the Middle English? And, personally, I did. -7-
on A thank you note(Not a poem at all) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
26 Jul 2005, 1:04 AM
You are childish. This proves it.
on some deleted poem
29 Jul 2005, 4:01 AM
I wondered why none of the people you thought about were Arabs. Then I read your reply to Dovina below. Good job. We SHOULD feel bad about everybody except them.
Love from Arabia,
zodiac
Love from Arabia,
zodiac
SOMEBODY: Haikus are supposed to be about nature!
zodiac: You can eat it.