| Re: a comment on Unwed by gilded in gold |
19-May-04/9:03 PM |
Since you've got a roadmap, how about unmarked or unplotted?
It would probably help if this poem made a bit of sense.
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| Re: a comment on Jesus, I funneled enough beer to marry that? by Bachus |
19-May-04/8:47 PM |
Yes. I mean, we moved to NC. I've lived here roughly since Lollapalooza was cool and, yes, it is as toothless and ign'r'nt as you've heard. I seriously haven't worn shoes for the last two days.
Incidentally, I just found out my wife and I are moving to Jordan in July. I hear the place is buggy with Islams.
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| Re: a comment on Unwed by gilded in gold |
19-May-04/8:40 PM |
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Your username means "covered in gold in gold."
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
19-May-04/2:07 PM |
Don't be too hard on yourself.
And for the record, I'm sorry I said Shuushin was a "Hey Guys" guy. I should have... well, I should have been the adult in that situation, and I wasn't. *tears*
PS-That last part would be a fine poem if you could find a way of saying it well. And you might as well know none of the people in any of my posts are very true-to-life, with the exception of the girl who tries to commit suicide by running into interstate traffic and the girl in the California poem, who is my wife, and who pronounces Chivas as "chi-VAHSS" rather than "CHI-vas".
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
19-May-04/1:46 PM |
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I guess what I'm trying to say is it shows.
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| Re: Jesus, I funneled enough beer to marry that? by Bachus |
19-May-04/1:45 PM |
Since you're in CA, I'm sure "Washington woman" means she's from the state of Washington. I've always heard other West Coasters consider Washingtonians the toothless rednecks of the West. Is that true?
I'm especially interested because I'm from Seattle and I was horrified at how quickly my parents turned into typical Southern white trash when they moved to North Carolina.
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| Re: a comment on Sarah's Song by wilco |
19-May-04/1:39 PM |
This is much better than "Meet Virginia", but it's still about some specific woman whom I can utterly not make myself believe actually exists.
You will answer something like: She does, I know her.
Nope. I'm still getting nothing.
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| Re: Just Like Before by cuddlytiger17 |
19-May-04/1:36 PM |
I don't just blab about this to anyone, but some of us at poemranker have devised a secret tool for writing really great poems, and I think it could really help your own poemwriting.
It's called the "John K Rhyming Dictionary For Beginners" and it's posted at the following link:
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=97250
I would definitely visit that page and add it to my favorites if I were you. Thanks, and keep on writing!
You're welcome.
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| Re: Sarah's Song by wilco |
19-May-04/1:30 PM |
I think writing poems about eccentric women is totally great and easy to boot.
Do you know the band Train? One of their songs is entirely about the eccentric things this woman named Virginia or Idaho or something does. If you try to say, "wait, women don't really do those things," Train just says, "well, Virginia does. It's real specific, see?" Trust me, I've tried telling them before and it was an enormous disaster.
But seriously, one of the things Virginia does is "wears high heels when she exercises." And half the people who hear it are like, "oh man, she's exactly like some woman I know! Train is such a great observer of human behavior!" Bullshit. I mean, come on, people! High heels? Jesus!
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| Re: A Civil Saving Strain by Enkidu |
19-May-04/1:23 PM |
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"To put it as humanly possible" needs at least two more words to start making sense.
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| Re: The butchers consolation (Kyrielle) by SupremeDreamer |
19-May-04/1:20 PM |
Fails to describe what a tripped-out freak street-poet you are.
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| Re: a comment on Pills by erickvisions |
19-May-04/1:17 PM |
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If by "rap" you mean the blundering rhymes of Debbie Harry on the Blondie song "Rapture", then yes.
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| Re: Re-drafting by Nicholas Jones |
19-May-04/1:15 PM |
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My thesis made excessive use of spelling sinister (and yes, slightly gay) messages with the first letters of each line. I win.
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| Re: a comment on Fear by Phalkon |
19-May-04/12:37 PM |
In addition to writing it, as you say, did you also invent your own language system, undecipherable to most, which you've shared with only your closest friends (i.e., Blindpoetry)? No? You meant for this poem to make sense in English? Then you fail.
At any rate, this conversation was innocent enough until you claimed I hadn't passed the fourth grade three comment-deletions ago. Now I trust you know who is the spanker and who's the spanked? Good. You may delete this comment at your leisure. After this, if you ever delete another of my comments I'll break your legs, punk. Okay? Thanks.
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| Re: Colour Town by Everyone |
19-May-04/7:37 AM |
Attn: Nicholas Jones -
Why do you think this poem deserved a 2, rather than a 1 or 0? Was it the line "I feel an unbearable ache"?
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| Re: Pills by erickvisions |
19-May-04/3:16 AM |
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| Re: Dizzy by erickvisions |
19-May-04/3:15 AM |
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| Re: black and blue by erickvisions |
19-May-04/3:15 AM |
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| Re: Forgotten by erickvisions |
19-May-04/3:15 AM |
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| Re: How To Fish by Blindpoetry |
18-May-04/5:40 AM |
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This poem is the ugly face of attention deficiency.
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