| Re: The Angry Bush by wilco |
19-Feb-04/7:17 AM |
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I think the last verse is okay, but it shouldn't be the last. Switch it with the third.
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| Re: a comment on Pre Dance Jitters by Butterflywriter |
17-Feb-04/4:03 PM |
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Rockmage is one of the all-time great sympathizers. He has sympathized to the point of pure meaninglessness.
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| Re: Freud suggested that I commit murder. by DreamerSupreme |
17-Feb-04/8:45 AM |
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"lifes'" is really "life's". And the stupid stage notes are just... stupid. And I'm not really that into poems about how crazy the author is. Read Catch-22. -10- <to keep you from sabotaging my hard-earned average ranking lol ;=-)> <>
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| Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa |
17-Feb-04/8:40 AM |
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I don't get the "we are not in ancient Rome" line. And it needs punctuation from the previous line. And I just don't get it. You could add another line after to clear that up a little. Until then -9-
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| Re: So Defined Is He! by jasondingus |
17-Feb-04/8:37 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Black Snake by Butterflywriter |
13-Feb-04/7:34 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Black Snake by Butterflywriter |
13-Feb-04/12:59 PM |
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The words pure and Alabama do not strike me as particularly sexy. I'll give you a buffalo-head nickel if you've ever been there.
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| Re: a comment on Black Snake by Butterflywriter |
13-Feb-04/12:23 PM |
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I wouldn't say connoisseur, no. But I like porn as much as the next guy.
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| Re: The musician by richa |
13-Feb-04/10:12 AM |
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Of course this is great. I was told yesterday by a professor that Pound's "At a station of the Metro" is one of the most-interpreted poems ever. May this one have such a long and heavily-anthologized life.
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| Re: Black Snake by Butterflywriter |
13-Feb-04/10:08 AM |
The word black followed by the word snake is so sexy to me.
Good-B------- is one of the silliest things done in poetry ever ever ever ever ever ever ever. I imagine you performing this, accompanying yourself with a dramatic reenactment. It would be fucking hilarious.
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| Re: If When We Die by lynnkyle |
13-Feb-04/10:01 AM |
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| Re: MIX FEELINGS by ctwilliams |
13-Feb-04/9:53 AM |
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I don't understand what is meant by your instructions. By mixing FEELINGS I only get EEFLINGS or SNIGFLEE, neither of which inspires anything in me. And (this just in passing) are you fucking daft?!
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| Re: a comment on House of the Risen Son by livingcanvas |
11-Feb-04/4:15 PM |
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So I've heard. It's not that good though.
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| Re: a comment on House of the Risen Son by livingcanvas |
11-Feb-04/12:55 PM |
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And don't forget Nina Simone. She recorded it before The Animals.
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| Re: a comment on First Shot by lastobelus |
11-Feb-04/10:51 AM |
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ALL good poetry tells stories. And a good thing too. If Homer had written something like "The World Today" or "I Don't Fit In" instead of two decent stories called The Iliad and The Odyssey, you probably wouldn't have a couple thousand years of culture to be shitting on with your near-complete ignorance, you little ducktard. 0.
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| Re: Offence by Stephen Robins |
10-Feb-04/11:24 AM |
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Is he eating cum out of his own bum? Is that possible?
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| Re: Lifes work by richa |
10-Feb-04/11:20 AM |
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I don't like the repetition of again. Probably just my taste, though.
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| Re: a comment on After the ice season ~ shamelessly lewd revision by zodiac |
9-Feb-04/11:17 AM |
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| Re: a comment on After the ice season ~ shamelessly lewd revision by zodiac |
9-Feb-04/11:16 AM |
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Not a great poem, but warm is an adjective.
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| Re: a comment on My heart had a war...no body won by sonawrote |
8-Feb-04/7:12 PM |
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