Comments byzodiac, 821–840 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener 18 Nov 2005, 9:41 PM
Yes. You must have noticed I'm not all about ending our discussions.

I propose that for the purpose of poemranker, the verb "to trump" always be regarded in its original, perjorative poemranker sense: to make an explosive noise whilst escaping in a cloud of smell.
replying on Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac 18 Nov 2005, 9:37 PM
I agree, but other punctuation is even more distracting given nentwined's fixed-width font fetish.
replying on Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac 18 Nov 2005, 9:36 PM
First, I read these out loud about a million times. It's the only way.

Second, I stole it from something I've read recently and forgotten. I have a list of "Words to Use in Poems" on my refrigerator I add to whenever I find a good one.

Third, at least, I'd rather be the sea-hurtler than the resigned crucifixion.

Fourth, of course. I don't actually live in Amman. I am having a lot of blackouts recently, though. Something about how it hasn't rained for the last 8 months, water's fouling the transformers.

I'm always surprised and flattered by your readings. I mean, surprised because there're things I'd given up on anyone seeing. Thanks. I mean that.
replying on Love letter by zodiac 18 Nov 2005, 9:04 AM
I've gotten lazy about poetry music recently. For my best (and only link) check here:

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=96818
replying on dit da haiku by nentwined 18 Nov 2005, 9:02 AM
This, unsurprisingly, is exactly what everyone always says about nentwined. That's his gift and curse.
replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 18 Nov 2005, 9:01 AM
Do you believe God wrote, inspired, or otherwise approves of the content of the Bible? Please don't parp. Answer yes or no.
replying on Bread and blackthorns by Caducus 18 Nov 2005, 8:59 AM
Do you remember a recent exchange about "labelling" or are you somehow unhinged?
replying on The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener 18 Nov 2005, 8:58 AM
That sentence is wrong on almost every count. You'll probably say I don't understand because I'm a man and therefore bound by reason. Or maybe (and more interestingly) you'll just say "flibbertigibbet".

PS-I found this for you. A gift:
"A man must have experienced all the illness he hopes to cure and all the accidents and circumstances he is to diagnose... Such a man I would trust."
Montaigne
replying on Haven by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 11:44 AM
I've always thought there's some confusion between intentional ambiguity (ie, you've thought of many possible reasonable interpretations and approve of all of them) and unintentional ambiguity (ie, you're just being vague and the truth is there's not even one very good interpretation but probably a lot of vague interpretations that the author is sort of gay.) However, the longer I write, the more I feel I'm guilty of the second kind. If I have to make a suggestion I'll say always aim for the first.
replying on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 11:40 AM
I've decided wasting time is the only dignified use of poetry.
replying on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 11:39 AM
Wow. I've never seen the word mana, but have always known manna. But you're right, I should have looked it up. Did any of the other commenters on this poem make the same mistake?
replying on Submission by Dovina 17 Nov 2005, 11:37 AM
All her other math- and programming-themed poems are about me. I regret to say I probably didn't respond very well.
replying on Love letter by zodiac 17 Nov 2005, 11:35 AM
This is a jingle. It's not an old post, just a new poem posted over an old post. I permit myself to do this because I've gone 8 months on this site without posting before, so I tell myself I'm not the problem. I've never dashed out a door, I'm just imaginative. The only unobvious metaphors are (a) my wife has a compound-word last-name so I always call her by compound words, including bellwether but also peashooter and lawnmower, among others, and (b) shaken baby syndrome. Look it up.
replying on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 11:27 AM
Please see Phenomenon, Fire in the Sky, Oprah, or any ABC or BBC daytime movie about comatose or vaguely transcendental people. On second thought, you'd probably do better not to see Phenomenon.

It's fair enough to say this poem evokes images and emotions for other people. I'll rephrase: This poem doesn't evoke images or emotions for me. I'm just one guy.

I think this site is better than allpoetry.com, but not for getting useful comments on your poetry.
replying on Haven by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 11:17 AM
I'd like to think I listen to me because I make sense, not because I paid for a degree. I'd also like to think that I make sense.
replying on Haven by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 5:39 AM
(i) Why not just ask him something only a major in his field would know? If he's not a real graduate and knows it anyway, are you really going to disrespect him for that?

(ii) Saying "You should listen to me on X because I have a degree in X" is bound to only get you swirlied in any crowd.
replying on Haven by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 5:37 AM
Me. You knew that.
replying on The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener 17 Nov 2005, 5:33 AM
Are you trumping?
replying on When Did You Walk Away? by TLRufener 17 Nov 2005, 5:32 AM
Oh. Okay. Well it was just a suggestion.
replying on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9 17 Nov 2005, 5:31 AM
Maybe so. And I'm sorry if that's the case. But I dare you to hit the "Random" link above, read til you're blind, and see if you don't come to the same conclusion.