on The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') by scitz
12 Jan 2004, 6:08 AM
I like the style a lot, and wish I had found it carved into a desk.
on Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie
12 Jan 2004, 2:13 PM
Simplistic but telling. I feel the part about the storks is slightly lacking, not really inforamtive. Perhaps relish whatever metaphor strikes you. Or perhaps keep it this way.
on deleted scenes by Bill Z Bub
12 Jan 2004, 6:09 AM
It totally hits. I don't know what I like about it but I still like it.
on Perfect by mytenderrage
18 Jan 2004, 8:52 AM
It's lacking, poetically. It tells rather than showing. I like that you know what you're saying but at the same time I'd rather the words illustrated instead of just plonking down their meaning.
on rules by roses are read
6 Mar 2004, 7:52 AM
I get that pudgy hip thing too.
on My thoughts and I by bdub420
12 Jan 2004, 3:37 AM
It's quite simple, like a song, which makes it effective but telling instead of showing, which bores me a bit.
on One Lump Or Two? by OneFingerAnswer
12 Jan 2004, 3:57 AM
Powerful words, excellent meter and rhythm.
on Sympathetic Guilt by middenHeap
12 Jan 2004, 2:06 PM
Intelligent. No con crit. Sorry.
on The most trite garbage ever(in other words my love life) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
12 Jan 2004, 6:07 AM
No, no, please save it for yourself. Give us something entertaining, something I want to hear. And don't speak of daggers. Everyone knows there's no such thing.
on van Gogh's Irises by lastobelus
12 Jan 2004, 2:09 PM
Painfulyl evocative. Plus it sounds like it's published.
on Nina Simone (part one) by zodiac
8 Feb 2004, 8:51 AM
I liked the second verse.
on Flies by Red_is_life
29 Feb 2004, 7:14 AM
"Loneliness" is spelt wrong. It's not poetic. Poetry is show, not tell.
on Ring Toss by Shin-Bojangles
29 Feb 2004, 7:17 AM
Rockin.
on Cold Rain Road by middenHeap
1 Mar 2004, 3:28 AM
Liked the first half but "steel cubes" lost my interest. And the ending - must every poemranker poet discuss piss, shit or paedophilia in every goddamn poem? I can't take this vulgarity much longer. *le "tired artist" sigh*
on Always And Forever by Pooh_N_His_Honey
6 Mar 2004, 9:12 AM
This is not a haiku. UH.