on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 10:18 AM
DA - oops, sorry, my bad
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 9:25 AM
Any suggestions?
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 2:36 PM
as long as it's not with your bad taco meat, beef-boy.
on haiku cycle 1 by mudskipper
22 Aug 2002, 2:39 PM
Very good, let's see some more. 7/10
on Hendrix by unknown
22 Aug 2002, 2:44 PM
I really do like the language, but at the same time feel it makes an enemy of the form. I especially like the ending, but I'm not quite loving it as a whole. 6/10
on aphelion by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 2:54 PM
Quit that cursed job and live again! Grow some balls and stop compromising, damn ye! Love the last bit. 7/10
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 3:14 PM
This should clear things up: starfish is a cute little nickname for my... no, you're right DA, they should know what we know. But god-woman-wife, didn't I explain this to you already today?
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 3:21 PM
Without becoming overly literal here, I beg to differ. oops, looks like my dirty little secret's out... look what you've gone and made me do, god-woman-wife!!!
on The Matrix by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 3:31 PM
First, glad you called this one a freeform. Second, I'm enjoying your little film critique ditties, yes indeed, I like it. Third, I agree, The Matrix is a big gun wankathon for boys with little guns ; ) 7/10
on Dark Lady by quantumenterprises
22 Aug 2002, 3:55 PM
I'm still laughing, I absolutely love this! At first I thought it was about sleep (yawn), but no, that's fantastic. While my preferred sleepmate is the red, red, wine, I still say 9/10 for the loving, and might I say, bittersweet ode.
on Window poems by kawakurdi
22 Aug 2002, 4:46 PM
This is absolutely beautiful. I'm normally rather cynical when it comes to straightforward 'love poems', but this one moved me - Bravo! 10/10
No, Alexander, I didn't kill him (in the literal sense anyway). And thank you so much for your kind offer to wrap yourself in my legs. I will give it some thought. I've been glancing through your work, and will certainly rank/comment as time permits today - like what I see so far ; )
on The Precious Thing by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
22 Aug 2002, 11:25 AM
Hits all the right angles, and then dangles, just so. 7/10
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 10:08 AM
I can see that this one may be too obscure. It was actaully inspired by a piece in one of Jeremi's poems, regarding women (Asian prostitutes specifically) who save themselves (cherry) for marriage by engaging in only anal sex (starfish = asshole). Just an image I got. Maybe too obscure though, huh?
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 10:26 AM
Ok, so literal cherries don't grow on a vine, and figurative cherries don't dangle, and it's a tad obscure. Me thinks I should delete and try this one again, hmm?
on Intense Irrational Realities by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 9:23 AM
Thanks Christof, glad you liked. And no, P&T, you most certainly cannot watch!
on Various 7-Eleven hold ups... by Bachus
22 Aug 2002, 9:27 AM
And dude, that is hilarious. 7/10
on some deleted poem
21 Aug 2002, 8:13 PM
OK, got it! I knew it would work for me once I got through that little snare, I was right there feeling it up until that point. 8/10