Now that's good clean fun! 7/10

May I steal those? Always on the hunt for functioning alliterations, dontcha know.

yes, this works really well when read fast and rambling - took me a few reads to get the cadence right, but yes, I've got it! 7/10

Try flying instead next time.

I'm teetering on the edge of loving this, but I need help. I'm feeling the constant internal battle to escape the ongoing pain of a broken heart/ lost love, but I'm thrown by "and her kind" in S2 and "She takes to the hills" in S4. I guess what's unclear to me is who "she" is in this piece. Or do I have the whole thing all wrong?

OK, death and her kind clears that one up just fine. But why did you decide to throw in the "she" after speaking in the first person throughout the rest of the piece? I'm suddenly thinking - where did 'she' come from? Dammit! Some jackass just dished me an anonymous '0' on my haiku without benefit of critique. I really fucking hate that. Sorry, back to the 'she'???

This is the funniest one I've read on this site! What happened to this guy? 7/10

Praise is fine and dandy, but when it comes from the likes of my favorite poets in this house - and there are really only 10 or so - I become oh so very tickled pink! Christof - thank you for the comparison(?) to one of my favorite poets, and for your concern that Venus could possibly be neglected. No man should neglect a goddess. Babbit - any feedback from you is appreciated, as you are most certainly a Poetry God. Thank you for your praise. Regarding the suggestion, I looked at again and found that I am much too attached to the ending to change it. Please try it again in a few days. wife god woman - thank you for summing it up nicely ;)

This piece reminds me of the time I wandered the Cimetiere du Montparnasse in Paris at 4am. Not the neglect, as it is very well kept, but the feelings of peace and beckoning you impart. 7/10 for evoking a great memory.

Your work is wrenching. Have you read any of Don Paterson's work? Much different in style but similar themes. 8/10

Thank god (or his wife, as the case may be) for a new 'inspirator' (yes I made it up). This piece reminded me of the time I was on a caye in Belize reading The Celestine Prophecy about six years ago, attempting to converse with the trees and plants around me. Looking back, I probably shouldn't have let the locals talk me into swallowing the viper at the bottom of the rum bottle. But I digress. Welcome and looking forward to more inspiring pieces from you. 8/10

Maybe best not to answer those calls. I know, easier said than done. Nice work. 8/10

I'm humbled by your work once again. You must be published. Please tell me that this is how you make your living. 10/10

Oh, to make a life within our dreams. Like your stuff! 7/10

8/10 for a pleasant image wrapped up tight

This manic, rambling style carries your obesession themes especially well. 7/10

Not at all crazy in my opinion, but I'm sure the poor girl has long since run screaming from your obsessive clutches. 8/10

Damn! I like it. Hunny? Is that you? 7/10

oh! so glad for the rewrite, as I missed this the first time around. So much here, so much, it makes me tingly. 10/10

I think I was at that Widespread concert, too!