on Turmoil by ThoughtfulSoul
16 Jan 2003, 10:31 PM
Nice sentiment. Bad poem.
on All you can eat by flatliner
16 Jan 2003, 1:51 PM
You also have a poem called "overweight." Are you fat? I weigh 316 pounds and have to buy two seats when I fly American Airlines. Anyway, I like the title and was excited to read the poem, but was a bit disappointed how you used the extended metaphor. So much for bringing expectations to something.
on No future by Freethinker1602
16 Jan 2003, 9:58 PM
Pimple poem, super sized!
on Life As a Boat by dougsoderstrom
16 Jan 2003, 10:30 PM
Bummer.
on some deleted poem
14 Jan 2003, 11:30 PM
Who is the woodsman? Are you saying I have no morals?
on some deleted poem
14 Jan 2003, 10:30 PM
Wow. Just, wow.
on some deleted poem
21 Jan 2003, 5:37 PM
Can you please tell me why you deleted my comment? It was both pertinent and insightful. Also, I was simply asking why you made the stylistic choice to cut off the gerund? Was it to achieve a reduction in language? I would appreciate in the future not to be cut off and deleted without an answer. If you go around placing harsh criticism in other writer's comment boxes, yet, delete yours, does that not make you a hypocrite? Again, welcome back to poemranker. I am glad to see you are a woman of principle.
on Perversions 3: Payback by razorgrin
16 Jan 2003, 10:04 PM
Are you talking about Ed Gein?
anyway...
You need serious help
this poem isn't worth the time and effort you spent to think up....
an moral impression of wasted space
anyway...
You need serious help
this poem isn't worth the time and effort you spent to think up....
an moral impression of wasted space
on Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond by Christof
16 Jan 2003, 10:30 PM
Maybe it is because I have never had the pleasure of going to a men's bathing pond, but that first image confuses me to no end. Can you explain it?
on The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom
16 Jan 2003, 10:43 PM
Duh. So we need a college educated man to spell it out for the masses? Is that it? Please, what was your purpose in writing this.
on some deleted poem
16 Jan 2003, 11:31 AM
Is that a new title? The first line makes me think of John Lennon singing "So this is Christmas".. La de da.
on <{Grasping^Grendals}> by Bachus
16 Jan 2003, 11:35 AM
Have you read "Grendal" by John Gardner?
on some deleted poem
16 Jan 2003, 12:18 PM
"To" should be "too" in two cases! What did they teach you in primary over there?
on The Golden Rule by Quarton
14 Jan 2003, 10:39 PM
The first sentence reminded me of this horrid children's book my daughter loves.
"Cautiously, the zebra wanders across the plain
Playfully, the giraffes dance and play in the water
Determinedly, the cheetah seeks his prey."
AAAHHHHH
Not to say this poem is horrid, it is just all about god this and not god that and after awhile the spiritual quest or the finding of comfort in the lack of spiritual quest is tiresome. Of course, every writer goes through it at some point. It was just the starting sentence, the adverbial clause, reminding me of that horrid book where the clauses fill each page, and the pictures cannot ease the pain of hearing my voice read those sentences. The horror. Sorry. Carry on.
"Cautiously, the zebra wanders across the plain
Playfully, the giraffes dance and play in the water
Determinedly, the cheetah seeks his prey."
AAAHHHHH
Not to say this poem is horrid, it is just all about god this and not god that and after awhile the spiritual quest or the finding of comfort in the lack of spiritual quest is tiresome. Of course, every writer goes through it at some point. It was just the starting sentence, the adverbial clause, reminding me of that horrid book where the clauses fill each page, and the pictures cannot ease the pain of hearing my voice read those sentences. The horror. Sorry. Carry on.
on some deleted poem
14 Jan 2003, 10:53 PM
Auster and Levertov, in my opinion, are his best translators. Of course, you can read him native. Quite interesting. Was this a quicke, or written over the study break?
on some deleted poem
16 Jan 2003, 9:55 PM
I like the title, but little else. Taro buns are the best!!!
on some deleted poem
16 Jan 2003, 1:27 PM
Fix the spacing. Then I will read it.
on Anchored pockets by INTRANSIT
14 Jan 2003, 11:18 PM
Another adverbial clause. They are everywhere. You know, Intransit, I am proud of you. You are up to 13 poems now and have yet to pull them all off.
on Drunk Satan by smlink84
16 Jan 2003, 9:49 PM
Pointless gibberish.