on To Kiss by Jody Conn
27 Sep 2002, 8:35 PM
This poem is horrible!!!!
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 8:51 AM
What place. you maight have something here if you find the proper context. As is, it is confusing.
on Cheap Thrills by Owner of the Sky
30 Sep 2002, 8:53 AM
Told me to much. Good thought, but it is not communicated effectively.
on the room's a'spinnin' by nentwined
30 Sep 2002, 12:07 PM
huh.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 7:19 PM
Is this a product of your deceitful thoughts over the weekend? Or is this to a father. Anyway, I am not sure I like it so much. Usually I haiku is more of a straight up image and this feels more like a statement.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 7:26 PM
and why do you put apostrophes around your titles?
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 2:05 PM
wow, this is heavy. Steven is like way cool. I thought "kutters" were actually :cutters," which were old stone masons. Didn't you see the greatest cycling movie of all time, "Breaking Away"? I am scared. Stuttering quite frankly with the seriousness of this amazing poem. Pull out the razor!! And the eyeliner. And just for future reference you are not living in Missouri but Misery! That will make all the difference.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 11:25 AM
It is a haiku DA, and it is a rather decent one.
on Parallel by aperfecttool77
30 Sep 2002, 11:37 AM
You have littered the recent list with your work. At least it reveals you revise and that will be important for this poem/lyric.
on At The Sloane Slattery on Saturday by Limness
30 Sep 2002, 11:55 AM
"The air is cool, the sun is hot,
In between seasons, and time's forgot"
I do not like this, no I do not, I do not like this I think it flops. I guess I want more from the ending. If it was as good as the first stanza, you would have it. I am not going to vote until you quit stopping off at the bar before coming home.
In between seasons, and time's forgot"
I do not like this, no I do not, I do not like this I think it flops. I guess I want more from the ending. If it was as good as the first stanza, you would have it. I am not going to vote until you quit stopping off at the bar before coming home.
on some deleted poem
27 Sep 2002, 11:34 PM
Why did you drop the s on word? Hey now you know everyone will read it! Then you can change the title and send it to press.
on some deleted poem
27 Sep 2002, 10:43 PM
Change the title and you have an excellent poem. You and z just spout these things!
on some deleted poem
27 Sep 2002, 10:56 PM
Isn't it just the World Bank?
on some deleted poem
27 Sep 2002, 8:32 PM
Okay who's the guy-Christof, babbit,DA, Dolyum, Frass (ha!)- come clean when you write these kinds of poems while on the curse.
on some deleted poem
27 Sep 2002, 1:59 PM
I'm sorry Amealea. I realise you are a sensitive sort and I don't want you to pick up your poems and leave. That just would not be right. I am actually both z and balth and I promise I will leave you alone from now on. Even in the chat room. you new friend, fred.
on The Drive In (Drugs broke her, she broke me) by <{Baba^Yaga}>
27 Sep 2002, 2:27 PM
Yo, Baba, as they say, "break a leg" tomorrow night! PK
on A Time for More War by dougsoderstrom
27 Sep 2002, 2:36 PM
But it is not really coming across as satire like a few of your other poems and therefore, in my opinion, it comes out as being straightforward, which, in my opinion, makes it sound ridiculous rather than humorous, which is possibly your intended meaning. In a situation like this you go almost use the tactic of crossing the line with humour which would force people to be disgusted and stunned, but force laughter as a nervous response. I do not know, you are the psychologist; you should really know how to manipulate a good yarn. As far as the actual recourse, I agree, but again I think it lies in the current policy that is before congress and most of the agenda is being puppeted through Bush by DICK. This is all his policy. He was spouting "pre-emptive" way back when. Invading Iraq is only a first step. Did you read the policy? It seems we no longer respect the concept of sovereignty considering we will no longer allow any other country to compete with us as a military super power. So does this mean pre-emptive strikes are in the future toward China?
on A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle
30 Sep 2002, 8:48 AM
Take a picture. thank you ever so much for wasting my time on this good day september 30, 2002. Take out the donut whole and really what do you have? a zero.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 7:20 PM
but I like the title.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2002, 11:27 AM
sucks as usual.