on I Miss You by Birdman42s
26 Mar 2003, 3:28 PM
No wonder Caducus writes weak poems. Look at the stuff he likes.
Hey, birdman: I miss you, too.
Hey, birdman: I miss you, too.
on some deleted poem
24 Mar 2003, 9:34 AM
"3am is the loneliest hour to shower." Just because it is late does that excuse you from the use of punctuation?
on some deleted poem
22 Mar 2003, 8:05 PM
My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!
on some deleted poem
26 Mar 2003, 11:41 AM
Again, some excellent writing here (Already crowded chest, You are phonecall father)that just needs tightening and a bit of clarity. you do a nice job of keeping emotions in check yet making a point. Unlike cadacus who vomits sap all over the page.
on Mirror to Mirror by Roisin
26 Mar 2003, 11:31 AM
And as a bulb buried
deep in wintry soil
knows not to die,
I really like these lines, which makes the last line pale a bit next to them. Can you find a way to stick with the image? Maybe. Maybe not?
deep in wintry soil
knows not to die,
I really like these lines, which makes the last line pale a bit next to them. Can you find a way to stick with the image? Maybe. Maybe not?
on some deleted poem
26 Mar 2003, 11:35 AM
Much of the wording is good here. I am a bit confused of the context of who "our" and "we" are. It seems awful ambiguous. But other than that a nice job overall.
on some deleted poem
24 Mar 2003, 10:49 AM
My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!
on Shut Up by openwounds
23 Mar 2003, 7:07 PM
Can you really hear silence? I believe there is a point in complete quiet where the ears can actually feel pain because they are trying so hard to hear something. Anyway, besides that I find the poem quite bad. Sorry. Have a nice day.
on some deleted poem
22 Mar 2003, 9:44 PM
Again, there is a fine line between sappy melodrama and quality insight. You fell off that line here and I can only hope it is merely a lack of experience in the subject. If not, then I suspect it is just bad writing.
on some deleted poem
22 Mar 2003, 8:07 PM
My name is Settle. I live in Rhode Island. I draw pictures and write poems to make you all vomit with laughter. I am cool. Yea!
on Blue Fuckin' Moon by lastobelus
16 Mar 2003, 7:33 PM
Some pretty good writing in here surrounded by obvious influences that take the voice from your own. Find out who you are in this piece and make it work. A thoughtful rewrite would clean things up.
on Triptych: Rural by lastobelus
16 Mar 2003, 7:51 PM
You swear fucking more than Mamet. the last one takes the cake. Can't say I am all that fond of the others. But what the fuck, eh.
on The Song I Miss by Miggy
16 Mar 2003, 7:48 PM
the song remains the same, migster.
on Easy Way Out by Blindproject217
23 Mar 2003, 7:01 PM
Is this about a pig?
on Looks like war, but tastes like chicken by Jeremi B. Handrinos
16 Mar 2003, 7:22 PM
Pretty funny stuff. Inspired by the girlfriend's job no doubt.
no, wait.
hahahahahahaaaaaahahahahahahahahahahah.
This poem is beyond bad.