on Necromantic Boo-boo by razorgrin
4 Dec 2002, 7:21 AM
This is above all my learning. When are finals over so your friend will come back. I lost her e-mail!
on Rich and the wall by INTRANSIT
4 Dec 2002, 7:18 AM
Funny and goofy at the same time.
on want of warmth by <~>
4 Dec 2002, 7:16 AM
Writing while drinking.
on Poem For Times Such As These by Nicholas Jones
4 Dec 2002, 7:15 AM
I think you have thirty poems here, not one. Tackling it all at once is a bit like a survey course in contemporary history. And that is what the poem feels like. If you take individual concerns from the poem and give them personal anecdotes you might achieve what you are looking for: to be revolutionary. I think all these issues are important to rip into, but if you want to affect change maybe you should not overwhelm the reader.
on she said by Bill Z Bub
4 Dec 2002, 7:08 AM
Excellent last stanza, although I am not a fan of the "yearning souls" bit. I realize it is important to the overall rhyme scheme, but the souls part good go. Call it "For a Good Time, Call".
on The Black Cottage by w~* ATHENA *~w
4 Dec 2002, 7:03 AM
I suggest in the future stealing from more obscure poets. These are too easy. Z do your thing! Must you continue these games. Do you write your own poetry?
replying on On waiting to pick up my daughter on Tuesday by poetandknowit
3 Dec 2002, 2:37 PM
You are right. It is a mere fragment written on the back of a credit card slip in the car. But you are correct and maybe at some point I will be ready to tackle the subject properly. thanks for the comment.
replying on Clive Barker's penis pump by horus8
30 Nov 2002, 5:37 PM
Hey, fuck you. I went to private school. I never had a parrot though. So is GW fat with acne just like you?
on Thats one rockin' bacchanalian orgy. by ==Doylum
27 Nov 2002, 9:30 AM
It is up to you Dolie to save the fate of English literature. Go now to the towns, to the country, rid the isles of cultural mediocrity. Ring your cowbell in the night, line them up, make them take notice. Take away their TVs. Do you prefer goats over pigs? Do they have souls? It is good to see you keeping with current events. This will get the Hours8 journalism approval.
replying on Friend by MysticalRaven88
27 Nov 2002, 9:28 AM
Yeah, it is the melting pot after all.
replying on Friend by MysticalRaven88
27 Nov 2002, 9:27 AM
Spoken like a true teenager. Hooray for boobies, and generic ideas of the world. Turn off the BBC and read a book so you do not sound like a dork.
on Frozen beauty by INTRANSIT
27 Nov 2002, 9:09 AM
Much better, but ditch the title.
replying on Some place west of here, or the big blah blah. both apply by horus8
26 Nov 2002, 7:39 PM
Well, since the Brits are panning the Yanks and the Welsh the Brits and Dolie is panning for gold and urananium in the midland of his own mind, shall we start our own civil war. Like the East coast sucks...how could anyone with sane mind live there?
Actually, I quite enjoy the haiku if used properly. I think it allows you: 1) to reduce emotion, sometimes difficult emotion, into simple images and 2) create pure imagery. However, folks seem to be tied up on English variations of it and forget the images for say, a comedic purpose. That bothers me. Ypu did not do that here, so don't pull a God's Wife on me.
on Pleas Dont.. by MysticalRaven88
26 Nov 2002, 7:17 PM
Well, Melinda, you are 14. Puberty has got you down, and let me tell you, it does not get any better from here on out. Pure acne.