replying on One Country by poetandknowit
15 Oct 2002, 9:01 AM
Yo no entiendo completamente la pregunta.
on Two Towers by Tascobar
14 Oct 2002, 1:28 PM
But are you really waiting for a plane if you are at work in WTF? I would have liked this more if they had crashed into an airport.
on Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
14 Oct 2002, 1:23 PM
How is it I am continually suckered into reading poems about what comes out of your pestilent ass? Tell me! I see you have a fan club. And I am not a tart. you are.
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2002, 9:43 AM
Your over sensitive nature is amusing. Baby as in poem. It is quite a new sort of thing; as first draft as my first drafts go.
replying on One Country by poetandknowit
14 Oct 2002, 7:34 AM
Quite right, quite right. Still a baby And in progress. Thanks for the catch.
replying on A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT
13 Oct 2002, 10:27 PM
you did what? Horus8 and then...huh? Just say it is a goof poem.
on A poets call to arms by INTRANSIT
13 Oct 2002, 9:46 PM
Goof poem.
replying on Wednesday's Breaking by poetandknowit
13 Oct 2002, 7:00 PM
Dead shape is there for a reason, and in your critique, you have pointed out exactly part of the poem's intentions. So, think on it some more. Mr. Magpie, you have valid points and I am working through them. thanks.
on The Washing by strider1
9 Oct 2002, 1:39 PM
It is the return of Newbie and bigbigdog (aka ASTRO GLIDE), Turbo Tom and the many other names you thought up in your little room.
replying on Trembling Worry by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 1:15 PM
That is the spirit a young pugilist should have. If it is not against your religion, you should look into the like of Thom Jones and, of course, Hemingway. Both had aspirations with the fists and both spin a pretty good yarn.
replying on Sisters of mercy by strider1
9 Oct 2002, 1:03 PM
It is Dolyum! Are you goth, tint?
replying on Sisters of mercy by strider1
9 Oct 2002, 12:58 PM
Then you are a 19-year-old undergrad, like my new friend Balackball and Tint, here. Now I see. And fingering convention? You are not doing that here. You are imitating someone else who fingered convention, just like a young lad would.
replying on Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit
9 Oct 2002, 11:36 AM
Thanks. I am glad I have at least some potential. Mum and pop think so. The sun thing is a play on John Donne's "The Sun Rising". It is an allegory. Does that make sense? Poets use that sort of thing sometimes, you know, to give the poem a little something more. And I suppose I use "and" as a stylistic choice. It is definitely a comtemporary American sort of thing. I use it much the same way you use too many commas, except for different reasons. I want to keep things moving. You automatically have the line break pause; well at times, I want to run right through it. Like a red light. Take the challenge see if something its me.
on Friendship by Blue Magpie
9 Oct 2002, 9:25 AM
There are good poets here, but it is a matter of patience. I like this, especially the last stanza and the last lines. The tone shift from stanza to stanza makes it work, although I am not sure the first line is such a happy little image. I know it is supposed to be light hearted, but a snowflake hitting a nose, well, usually melts. I
replying on Drunken note #1 by blackball
9 Oct 2002, 12:31 AM
Successful today, not way back when...sorry, I saw the hits coming a mile away on that one.
replying on Drunken note #1 by blackball
9 Oct 2002, 12:23 AM
We were never not cool.
replying on Drunken note #1 by blackball
9 Oct 2002, 12:19 AM
Of course, you think it is good. Because it is good. It is just young and it is blowing away its intended audience. But how many successful writers are 19 or 20? There is a reason for that. Experience. It may be a cliche, it may be a stereotype, but it is everything. She has the tools and the talent. The rest with come with age.
replying on Drunken note #1 by blackball
9 Oct 2002, 12:14 AM
His. Yes. But mostly his novels and short stories, but he is a damn good poet also.
on Drunken note #1 by blackball
9 Oct 2002, 12:02 AM
If you come across Sherman Alexie's (he is a writer that is not dead) "Alcoholic Love Poems," read them. It might help you clear these up a bit.