That was on The Sopranos last week. :0)

tequila....my arch-nemesis....once again you worm your way back into my life...bastardo.

Who was it that sang that song "We've Only Just Begun"? Olivia Newton John? I don't know....

Anyway, another good one.

now that's pretty.

First, I think that you definitely need to get some more experience before you write something like this. It's a good sentiment but you're ruining it with your lack of style and understanding of how to write. Take the advice of SupremeDreamer.

This is better than the last one of yours that I read, but still, consider taking the advice in those comments.

How many people have you killed Shin Shuu (if that is, in fact, your real name)?

You're getting better. Just try not to force the rhymes so much.

unpainted moments, eh.....ok...I'll bite -9-

oh Sasha, you little scamp.

Nope, but I guess there's some meaning to it.

sitting on a steamboat...whittling lemmings...throwing overboard...this could be a blast with the right chemical mixture.

just a word of advice...stop naming your poems "untitled". Surely you can come up with a name for them. That title just makes the whole thing boring even if it isn't.

not too bad.

No vote - because you voted on your own poem.

Does it ever get old being a bargain-basement
-=Dark_Angel=-?

I can't decide if this is about schizophrenia or OCD (both maybe?). At any rate, you seem to have a pretty good grasp of mental disorders...I'm guessing you either have one yourself or know someone who does. This isn't the first one of yours I've read dealing with this subject. Anyway, it's not bad.

This is MUCH better. Is this a new one that you wrote?

strange creatures, cicadas.

I really like this:

Elton John plays in my mind,
And I guess that’s why they call it the blues.