on Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago
29 Oct 2004, 8:15 PM
rigiditus nippulatum, et clampostona ingratiae solorum solarum, slapadiddle dildatum
on The Star Of The Bum by Blindpoetry
29 Oct 2004, 8:18 PM
is this written in braille or some other code?
on The correct order of things by Stephen Robins
29 Oct 2004, 8:22 PM
a nude, three-legged sack race in a mosquito swarm.
on some deleted poem
29 Oct 2004, 4:20 PM
a stinky pile of piles
on I WILL SURVIVE by massangel62
29 Oct 2004, 4:25 PM
you have an ugly face
on I Don't Care by ForgottenSoul17
29 Oct 2004, 4:27 PM
a floppy, shaven walrus clit
on some deleted poem
29 Oct 2004, 4:38 PM
a dumpling, surrounded by a moat of the brownest gravy.
on some deleted poem
29 Oct 2004, 8:50 PM
it has been wrote? is this really what you meant to said?
on Secada (Parody of sasha's lying vagina) by Bachus
29 Oct 2004, 5:43 PM
asshole. nigger. stupid sonovabitch. Idiot. imbecile. mammoth.
on From Womb To Wood by Caducus
29 Oct 2004, 7:49 PM
I don't think the end redeems anything. He should never have died? hmmmm
I thought it was well conceived and well written until the last few lines... though the entire last stanza is awkward.
I thought it was well conceived and well written until the last few lines... though the entire last stanza is awkward.
on some deleted poem
29 Oct 2004, 7:57 PM
you have a smaller mind.
you must have a mind full of distorts.
i hope you are young and have not exhausted your capacity for learning and change. This "poem" is horribly garbled. Is English your native language?
you must have a mind full of distorts.
i hope you are young and have not exhausted your capacity for learning and change. This "poem" is horribly garbled. Is English your native language?
on The Old Man by spriggan
29 Oct 2004, 8:01 PM
fucking hilarious. Why is he taking pain killers that poison his body? There are perfectly good painkillers on the market that do not poison the body.
nothing worse than a poor afficted soul, eh? the end line makes it all worth while, and completely stands this motherfucker on its head and redeems it with a broom handle.
nothing worse than a poor afficted soul, eh? the end line makes it all worth while, and completely stands this motherfucker on its head and redeems it with a broom handle.
on The Old Man by spriggan
29 Oct 2004, 8:02 PM
a gaping hole. This is great.
on some deleted poem
31 Oct 2004, 6:06 AM
Great. Just right, i think.
on some deleted poem
1 Nov 2004, 5:12 AM
Questions:
is the tense change confusing? does it detract?
Is it horribly garbled and difficult to decipher?
I can't think of anything else at the moment.
is the tense change confusing? does it detract?
Is it horribly garbled and difficult to decipher?
I can't think of anything else at the moment.
on some deleted poem
1 Nov 2004, 5:15 AM
Is the last sentence overly complex and unwieldy?
on Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT
1 Nov 2004, 5:57 AM
The closest takes flight arcing in earnest.
"Oh, I know you didn't just..."
I close one eye and hunker
expecting a sudden and bleeding passenger.
I click on the four-ways and ease
to the shoulder.
The sentence structure becomes repetitive, with all the "I-verb-object"
"Oh, I know you didn't just..."
I close one eye and hunker
expecting a sudden and bleeding passenger.
I click on the four-ways and ease
to the shoulder.
The sentence structure becomes repetitive, with all the "I-verb-object"
on Going Blind by Sasha
1 Nov 2004, 12:38 PM
"are you with me Dr. Poo, are you really just the shadow of the man that I once knew?"
on My Poison ( Vodka ) by Brittanyy
3 Nov 2004, 9:05 AM
so, you are saying, "now you copulate in the flame" ?