Free verse № 123303
Utensils of creation
My utensils of creation may mean nothing when I mention,
Anything is possible if you hold the right intention,
What I am meaning to say donât get carried away,
Be a human without a label that cannot and will not decay,
And now I will write to you a guide within my self,
It may not reach you but to someone else it may be of help,
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I will absorb this mass creation today I will find peace,
So that when I come across something it cannot backtrack me,
I will acknowledge what I found today I will not judge,
So that my mind can see the truth for everything it could,
I will let go of all the meaning today I will be free,
So I can find myself alone in my company I will receive,
I will accept enlightenment today I feel like god,
So I can share my love with all I should especially those lost,
Then will come growth like any natural process,
But if I see no improvement I will not feel hopeless,
At the end of the day there are no words to say to drastically change your life,
Politics prove this through words they miss but there actions control our minds.
31 comments
comedy gold, right there.
I hope you realize you're being a grammar nazi nazi. Or is that meta-grammar-nazi? grammar nazi squared?
Since you've clearly never asked yourself this question, let me ask you: what would you say distinguishes "language" from, for example, some series of grunts and hoots a group of baboons might make when another baboon flashes their bright red ass at them (as they are wont to do)? That's right...rules.
Maybe you would feel more comfortable hanging out on baboonpoetryranker.com. You can express your feelings there, with any old series of grunts and hoots, (or more to the point, any old strung together series of incomplete phrases and disjointed aphorisms) and without putting any effort into making your pomes intelligible.
(I apologize for my rampant primatism)
Anyway, grammar has everything to do with writing what you feel. For example, by leaving "there" (instead of "their") you make the poem mean something entirely different from what you feel. It's not politician's actions that control our minds, it's just some actions... there.
For another example, you don't even know what you think and communicate like a fucking cerebral-palsied, you fucking moron. You basically prove:
1) Politicians don't use life-changing words;
2) Politicians control our minds; therefore,
3) There are no life-changing words.
- which is fucking idiotic.
For yet another example, you can't even communicate or read well enough to know what someone commenting on your poem is saying, anyway. You think we're having some big argument about whether "the subjects interlink they are not one", whatever that means, and you're probably all pissed about it and punching walls and shit, and no one's said anything of the kind. I've said some of the lines are simply WRONG. If you wanna wrassle, try answering that, buddy.
Why don't you try to make sense and stop spazzing all over the place? Hey, good luck!
1. I dont get stressed I am on the journey into spiritual development and meditation.
2. The last two lines simply mean it is not the words you use but the actions you choose.
3. I am only 17 meaning I have many more years to grow, how long have you.
4. Being offensive over someone elses work just shows how egotistic you really are you fu*king idiot.
5. The reason these poems do not make complete sense is because I freestyle them onto paper hence grammar is but a subject I will master with time and practice.
Swallow that mister.... mister..... mister......
And stop making assumptions. For one, I spend all day sitting around a desert, not a computer; for another, it's just more fun to say "fucking moron" than other, equivalent things. If people like you touched a nerve, I would have hemorrhaged to death over poemranker months ago.
1. You couldn't spiritually develop your way out of a damp cardboard box.
2. Why didn't you say so? Cause what you've said is ridiculous.
3. I don't understand what this point's saying. Do you mean that you've almost graduated high school? I got a 1580 on the SAT; what did you get?
4. You're wrong there. Maybe it means I've just run out of non-offensive original ways of saying things.
5. Whatever. Like anyone wants to read your freestyle ramblings.
Wow you really have got the intention to save the world!!!!!!
BIKES: I, Damien, have a 24-speed bike. What've you got?
I'll be waiting.
Seeken spiritual development classes
attended Karate classes
Read lots of self help books
Practiced Nunchucks at home
Practised Bokken at home
Read a great book once "understanding the subconcsious"
Pass the same homeless person on the way to work and give him something from the shop every time.
Really this is silly. Who are we proving ourselves to.
For another example, you don't even know what you think and communicate like a fucking cerebral-palsied, you fucking moron
Class!
Of course it was!
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A doily-flavoured groin-operated dwarf foetus disguised as a beardtronic ultrabum harvester
An unspeakably disappointing spoon coated in vicar discharge
A pneumatic fatally abnormal hobo sausage injected with vicar concentrate
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