Re: done than said by francis nor capule	edpeterson 68.79.27.79	19-May-04/9:40 AM
I don't like the last stanza. up until then, i had 10.
Re: The Other Side Of Never by <{Baba^Yaga}>	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	19-May-04/5:02 AM
Judith Chalmers
Re: The butchers consolation (Kyrielle) by SupremeDreamer	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.16	19-May-04/5:39 AM
Bulging with a bum-like idiocy.
Re: Pills by erickvisions	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.16	19-May-04/5:42 AM
Fantastic use of "twitching" to rhyme with "itching" and "bitching"!!!1 -10-
Re: Pills by erickvisions	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	19-May-04/6:16 AM
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Re: Colour Town by Everyone	zodiac 67.240.192.16	19-May-04/7:37 AM
Attn: Nicholas Jones - Why do you think this poem deserved a 2, rather than a 1 or 0? Was it the line "I feel an unbearable ache"?
regarding some deleted poem...	tadpole 24.55.114.92	19-May-04/8:09 AM
beautiful
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 65.54.97.141	19-May-04/7:55 AM
The way the poem is laid out reminds me of a song by "Lit." You understand it to mean different things until the entire sentence is sung. " You make me come You make me complete You make me completely miserable." I think it was their only good song. Your poem is better because of all the bodies in the tree house (pine box?).
Re: Dildo (formerly titled "It") by http://bandgeek	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	19-May-04/1:01 PM
Is this about new found land?
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	19-May-04/1:01 PM
I have breasts in my new one too.
Re: The butchers consolation (Kyrielle) by SupremeDreamer	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	19-May-04/1:04 PM
Are you one of dem serial killers?
Re: black and blue by erickvisions	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	19-May-04/1:08 PM
How many damn visions does erick get?
Re: Re-drafting by Nicholas Jones	zodiac 67.240.211.31	19-May-04/1:15 PM
My thesis made excessive use of spelling sinister (and yes, slightly gay) messages with the first letters of each line. I win.
Re: The butchers consolation (Kyrielle) by SupremeDreamer	zodiac 67.240.211.31	19-May-04/1:20 PM
Fails to describe what a tripped-out freak street-poet you are. -0-
Re: A Civil Saving Strain by Enkidu	zodiac 67.240.211.31	19-May-04/1:23 PM
"To put it as humanly possible" needs at least two more words to start making sense.
Re: Sarah's Song by wilco	zodiac 67.240.211.31	19-May-04/1:30 PM
I think writing poems about eccentric women is totally great and easy to boot. Do you know the band Train? One of their songs is entirely about the eccentric things this woman named Virginia or Idaho or something does. If you try to say, "wait, women don't really do those things," Train just says, "well, Virginia does. It's real specific, see?" Trust me, I've tried telling them before and it was an enormous disaster. But seriously, one of the things Virginia does is "wears high heels when she exercises." And half the people who hear it are like, "oh man, she's exactly like some woman I know! Train is such a great observer of human behavior!" Bullshit. I mean, come on, people! High heels? Jesus!
Re: Just Like Before by cuddlytiger17	zodiac 67.240.211.31	19-May-04/1:36 PM
I don't just blab about this to anyone, but some of us at poemranker have devised a secret tool for writing really great poems, and I think it could really help your own poemwriting. It's called the "John K Rhyming Dictionary For Beginners" and it's posted at the following link: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=97250 I would definitely visit that page and add it to my favorites if I were you. Thanks, and keep on writing! You're welcome.
Re: Jesus, I funneled enough beer to marry that? by Bachus	zodiac 67.240.211.31	19-May-04/1:45 PM
Since you're in CA, I'm sure "Washington woman" means she's from the state of Washington. I've always heard other West Coasters consider Washingtonians the toothless rednecks of the West. Is that true? I'm especially interested because I'm from Seattle and I was horrified at how quickly my parents turned into typical Southern white trash when they moved to North Carolina.
regarding some deleted poem...	Freethinker1602 68.48.30.210	19-May-04/2:33 PM
very strange, just htought you need a vote, 7 it entertained me
Re: Just Like Before by cuddlytiger17	wilco 24.176.102.131	19-May-04/3:25 PM
You're getting better. Just try not to force the rhymes so much.