| Re: Fourteen Years by impert&ent |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/8:26 PM |
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Though the last three stanzas are good, the "Sparkbook" appellations make me think this poem should be entitles "14 ways of looking at Bow'ls"
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Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/8:13 PM |
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Now I've got to hand it to you. Anyone who's second on the recent list with a ranker average of over 6 is worth something.
Although I fail to see in this anything that would sound semi-decent only when accompanied by a guitar.
Therefore: Bow'ls.
But -10-
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| Re: Desire by mk32 |
caitydee 205.188.116.68 |
11-May-04/8:17 PM |
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Some lines were a little awkward but I'm not as into style and grammar as most people on this site are-for me poetry is about expressing what you need to express-I felt and connect with what you were expressing-for that-well done, I enjoyed this.
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| Re: Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17 |
cuddlytiger17 64.80.244.55 |
11-May-04/5:27 PM |
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I refuse to argue anymore with any of you. This is all pointless. People's opinions and beliefs differ depending on the person. No one is right or wrong. Sasha I don't know why you're so hung up on trying to bring me down...My goal isn't to try to impress others, I've already stated that. But you can't expect me at 16 to have experienced "all there is" and to have grown enough to "meet your standards" of what a "good" poem is. This arguing is all really childish and thats why I'm at least ending my half of it here.
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Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/6:33 PM |
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You sound like a combination between a drunk and a bad stand-up comedian
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/7:01 PM |
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Oh, and, because this word has amused me so much:
Bow'ls
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| Re: Highschool in My Head by MacFrantic |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/7:03 PM |
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| Re: What You Give by NoSage |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/7:04 PM |
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| Re: Doe by OneFingerAnswer |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.225 |
12-May-04/3:00 AM |
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Great use of 'cried' to rhyme with 'side', but was her head really hung in defeat? I doubt it. You just needed her head to be hung in something that rhymed with 'feet'.
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| Re: Style / Ffordd by Nicholas Jones |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/7:33 PM |
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Pam wyt ty'n sgrifennu'n gymraeg? Naill ai yn Gymraeg neu yn Saenseg, mae dy ysgrifen heb dull a heb pwynt. (Does ddim pwynt sgrifennu fel twpsyn)
ond....Pam lai?
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| Re: Style / Ffordd by Nicholas Jones |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/7:36 PM |
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Samuel Becket dit qu'ecrire en français
le permit d'ecrire sans style.
Eh bien, je ne parle pas tres bien français,
Donc il me faudra une autre langue seconde pour
Mettre sa theorie à la preuve:
Voyez-vous, il n'y a guère style là :
Moins qu'en "Waiting for Godot"
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| Re: Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/8:44 PM |
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| Re: Say the Word 'Trousers' Without Laughing by Nicholas Jones |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/8:48 PM |
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| Re: Say the Word 'Trousers' Without Laughing by Nicholas Jones |
Sasha 69.138.236.63 |
11-May-04/8:48 PM |
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| Re: heart & soul by crwncka1 |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
12-May-04/2:47 AM |
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| Re: Heartbroken by PimpinBitch15 |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
12-May-04/2:53 AM |
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You are a snot gobbler.
In no way does this endless mass of cuntbutter deserve anything above an 8. This poem is a narcissistic mess and the imagery is some of the weakest I have ever read.
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| Re: Sonnet on an Operating Table by Sasha |
Nicholas Jones 137.44.1.30 |
12-May-04/3:06 AM |
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This good, I like the attempt to bring in the sounds of the situation. And it makes me think of 'Lady Godiva's Operation' by the Velvet Underground, which is a great song.
Here comes the moment of great decision
As the doctor is making his first incision.
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| Re: opening time? by wormsy |
Nicholas Jones 137.44.1.30 |
12-May-04/3:09 AM |
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I've always assumed that, in the original, the half rhyme was meant to imply that really Dr. Foster had stepped in a piddle right up to his middle, and it was in fact a sewage related incident.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215 |
12-May-04/5:17 AM |
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You fail at everything that requires making a distinction between two fairly similar things. This poeme does not undo your failure.
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| Re: ...So We Stayed In The Water by Fear of Garbage |
zodiac 67.240.211.45 |
12-May-04/6:13 AM |
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The best part is the spiders that cover you like insects.
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