regarding some deleted poem...	hatedestruction 167.196.165.135	5-May-04/7:49 AM
I was tripping shrooms while writing this, so it isn't that great, but I try
Re: The Influence of Anxiety by Nicholas Jones	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/7:52 AM
I love it. There are far too many poetry snobs and pedants on this site. I say fuck poetry.
Re: On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/8:02 AM
I fail to see the connection between the two limericks, but I do not see a real need for connection... after all we can only post every 2 days. Funny limericks.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/8:03 AM
This has to be the worst poem that i have ever read. 10
Re: California triolets by zodiac	MacFrantic 204.98.23.69	5-May-04/8:43 AM
I love subtlety and I find the use of semicolons to accent the meaning of the words a perfect fit. Incredible imagery. *10* This is my favorite poem in a while.
regarding some deleted poem...	MacFrantic 204.98.23.69	5-May-04/8:54 AM
One small problem. Nothing too big. The mother's son is only four and he's strapped in the passengers seat. My God, this woman IS reckless! Also, might not be acting in too many preschool plays! Overall a moving poem. *8*
Re: American Idle by wilco	some deleted user 17.255.240.138	5-May-04/1:23 PM
This poem expresses your feeling. As the arguement goes between this and presenting an enjoyable poem, I tend toward correctness and understandability, but I think this needs a lettle help in the prose dept. Good feelings like these are worthy of a little more care on the presentation. For what it's worth.
Re: When she beats me by Win	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/11:24 AM
The love bout.
Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/11:27 AM
HAHAHAHAHAHa. bearded with love.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/11:29 AM
the sheer horror causes me to avert my eyes and spin.
Re: On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	5-May-04/11:37 AM
Help me with "tightly jarred" Good ones, even with my confusion.
Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	5-May-04/12:02 PM
... FIRST WE WITNESSED THE BIRTH OF AN IDEA ... 29-Mar-04/7:57 AM: "I don't mean poets shouldn't try to write about those things, but they would have to be more careful doing it than, say, writing about ducks with AIDS or appropriate beard materials for homemade Negro Jesuses, since so many people have written about Love and so on before and hardly anyone has written about ducks and Jesuses - sadly." ... THEN WE WERE GIVEN TEASINGLY CRYPTIC PROMISES ... 21-Apr-04/7:47 PM: "The best title in ages is "Beard My Homemade Negro Jesus", coming soon to poemranker!" ... AGAIN WE HEARD RUMOURS OF THE IMPENDING MASTERWORK ... 22-Apr-04/5:02 PM: "I think Justin would be more impressed if you wrote poems about non-Justin things for a change, like Beard Materials for Homemade Negro Jesuses. No offense, just my opinion, etc etc etc etc etc." ... AND NOW, AFTER MANY SLEEPLESS NIGHTS WRESTLING TO BREAK FREE FROM THE GILDED HARNESSE OF COMMON DECENCY, THE POEME OF THE YEAR HAS BEEN UNLEASHED ...
Re: Everglades parkway by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 17.255.240.138	5-May-04/1:41 PM
Again, I'm sorry, but the title seems unjust to your story. And why not include egret/regret somehow? - I liked that. It's a good, sad story everyone can understand, so why not a dignified title?
Re: A Valley Girl's Rendition of "Fire and Ice." by Enkidu	some deleted user 17.255.240.138	5-May-04/1:46 PM
Funny. hate is like cold - ok, maybe more like cold than its usual hot descriptor.
Re: When she beats me by Win	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.68	5-May-04/1:59 PM
needs a bit of a hint as to what woman we are dealing with here. mom? sis? girlfriend? other? It is worthy of the effort.
Re: The Towel Head Blues by horus8	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.68	5-May-04/2:19 PM
I thought it said Eric fucking Stoli....oooopsie.
Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.68	5-May-04/2:28 PM
I kept one 'cos I'm broke.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.68	5-May-04/2:52 PM
Out of my jurisdiction. Just.
Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	MacFrantic 198.81.26.15	5-May-04/4:56 PM
Yo kno thlat feelingg wen your lafghing so hrd its impsobble too ttype
Re: Lorca's Terrible Presence (Edit) by Sasha	zodiac 67.240.192.43	5-May-04/5:07 PM
You'd do Lorca's rhythm better if you wrote something more like: I want the white water to rest with no bed I want for the wind to be left without dells You might at least go 12-syllabic. I see you've (roughly) done it later on, but the first two lines are glaringly off-beat. And the trick of expanding the english line with _____ and/or _____ at the end three stanzas in a row kind of shows. And Lorca punctuated throughout, hijo. And my one other criticism: you might consider an exciting writer for once. How's your Russian? Some recent Russian poets are totally ace.