regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	4-May-04/6:39 PM
I really dislike the title. egret is a good play on regret, but why not do it within the poem and spare us wondering right away what you are sputtering about. Otherwise good.
Re: Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	4-May-04/6:48 PM
It rings like a haiku, and maybe could be a haiku of many verses. Just a thought.
Re: Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	<~> 64.252.164.251	4-May-04/6:54 PM
http://www.nme.com/artists/photos/photo/21446.htm
Re: Working at the Garden Market by jessicazee	horus8 24.130.62.63	4-May-04/7:53 PM
I'm a hoe.
Re: Funeral of My Childhood by Spindle	horus8 24.130.62.63	4-May-04/8:11 PM
'twas me said the bean to Uranus.
Re: As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	horus8 24.130.62.63	4-May-04/8:13 PM
Unreadable smut.
Re: As Catullus Said (Updated and Revised) by Sasha	horus8 24.130.62.63	4-May-04/8:14 PM
O wait I get it, Dick.
Re: The Towel Head Blues by horus8	wilco 24.176.102.131	4-May-04/8:21 PM
Ahhh, Bush....the pimple on America's ass. Well, one of them anyway....we need some ass Clearasil.
Re: California triolets by zodiac	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	5-May-04/2:14 AM
Very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	5-May-04/2:18 AM
Nauseating alliteration would probably improve the second verse. In all other ways this poem was like reading a used nappy.
Re: California triolets by zodiac	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	5-May-04/2:32 AM
I will be contacting the F.B.I.
Re: American Idle by wilco	hatedestruction 167.196.165.135	5-May-04/5:32 AM
going nowhere, nice...
Re: California triolets by zodiac	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	5-May-04/5:41 AM
Nice one! Another great use of a form. The repetition with the driving and the smoking and the reading works really well with this travelog feel. A well-deserved Ten.
Re: American Idle by wilco	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	5-May-04/5:46 AM
"fatigue is my color." - very very good. There are so many standard set pieces in here though, I can't decide if its giving it a classic, or a tired feel. Hmmm... That line though, love that.
Re: The Towel Head Blues by horus8	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	5-May-04/5:49 AM
Strong stuff. Too strong maybe; such a thing may exist. (I'm put off a bit by the language.)
Re: California triolets by zodiac	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/7:25 AM
Good poem about california toilets, though i am not so sure the subject matter really reflects the title.
Re: American Idle by wilco	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/7:27 AM
ANybody who curses at the cubs gets an automatic 10. though this was a very good poem on its own.
Re: American Idle by wilco	zodiac 67.240.192.65	5-May-04/7:31 AM
10 for "fatigue is my color". There are so many things about this poem I'd change if it were mine; that line isn't one of them.
Re: Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco	edpeterson 68.79.3.67	5-May-04/7:36 AM
Don Henley??? Oi vey.
Re: American Idle by wilco	zodiac 67.240.192.65	5-May-04/7:43 AM
Speaking of those Idol shows, Ben Folds' "Army" is a great model for anyone trying to write ace pop songs. Bjork's "Army of Me" is not.