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Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
2-May-04/7:33 PM |
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| Re: the beale street mud festival. by wilco |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
2-May-04/7:35 PM |
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"only sound" really is tough to pull off...
Some nice images here.
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| Re: Utility Rose by Enkidu |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
2-May-04/8:26 PM |
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s1 - Great
s2 - Good
s3 - Don't get it.
s4 - Can't relate the two lines
s5 - Great
s6 - It reflects s1 and is great
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| Re: the beale street mud festival. by wilco |
richa 81.178.232.136 |
3-May-04/12:52 PM |
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Cute, the inversion in the second verse is a little baffling (lightly breaking the rain rather than the rain lightly breaking).
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Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
3-May-04/10:56 AM |
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Free coupon for "Grandma's Wildflower and Mulch Mix" with every comment or vote.
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| Re: Gothic by zodiac |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
3-May-04/8:28 AM |
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A well-done story-poem. But I don't get the last line.
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| Re: Go Figure by MacFrantic |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
3-May-04/8:35 AM |
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The first and last verses are a frame for a vague picture in between. The picture gives impressions, not conclusions. Good.
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| Re: the beale street mud festival. by wilco |
edpeterson 68.79.20.161 |
3-May-04/9:17 AM |
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| Re: Black Belt by etherealmaiden |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215 |
3-May-04/9:26 AM |
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I'd quite like it if you tightened the belt around your hands.
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ggawrysi 147.9.151.22 |
3-May-04/9:32 AM |
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some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
3-May-04/10:10 AM |
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| Re: Black Belt by etherealmaiden |
Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
3-May-04/11:01 AM |
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I must say that it does convey a sense of increasing constriction.
How 'bout making this a concrete with a shape like an hourglass?
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| Re: All Alone by QuirkyWonder |
edpeterson 68.79.20.161 |
3-May-04/11:05 AM |
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put down the pen.. and slowly back away from the paper. Pick up a chair and begin to bludgeon yourself until you can no longer stand.
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
3-May-04/11:36 AM |
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| Re: Poet by Shardik |
MacFrantic 204.98.23.93 |
3-May-04/11:39 AM |
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What a great poem...
Everywhere is one word- S6 L2
...loved "You raped my mind professionally"
Brilliant *10*
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| Re: Gothic by zodiac |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
3-May-04/11:43 AM |
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This is a rather somber story, if I'm understanding it correctly.
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edpeterson 68.79.20.161 |
3-May-04/12:11 PM |
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summary: People are stupid.
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Shuushin 147.154.235.53 |
3-May-04/12:39 PM |
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Would maybe the impact be stronger if the first stanza went last?
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richa 81.178.232.136 |
3-May-04/12:48 PM |
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Pretty good all the way through, never sure about parentheses myself.
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| Re: Go Figure by MacFrantic |
richa 81.178.232.136 |
3-May-04/12:50 PM |
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Alright, not mad keen on the first verses, I can't work myself out sentiment. Tire should be tyre I think.
Like the final verse.
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