Re: The Air That Escapes His Lungs. by cleverdevice	zodiac 152.30.44.39	28-Apr-04/6:08 PM
When you write these poems, do you give any consideration to how they work in real-life, or is it all about the allegory? To wit: "The air that escapes his lungs shall not return," - The truth is that it probably will sooner or later, especially if he's in some kind of phone or porn-viewing booth. I just think it would help for you to keep that kind of thing in mind, is all. You know, write poems about things that could actually happen. -Feeling Helpful in Waukeegan
Re: Heat by Shardik	zodiac 152.30.44.39	28-Apr-04/6:13 PM
One minute after dozing, I thought that I was a-blazing, My blood it was a-boiling, It was amazing.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 152.30.44.39	28-Apr-04/6:19 PM
Conspicuously missing: - Fear of Garbage, - Hypatia, - S-D, - Shuushin, - Caducus, - Joe-joe, - Blindpoetry, - richa - tpbod. Come on people! Fraser - Will there eventually be categories? I respectfully request to not be included with the gays or prepubescents. Thank you.
regarding some deleted poem...	<~> 64.252.164.251	28-Apr-04/6:57 PM
most favoritest bit: shore and azure swells That glint in well-thumbed pearls, nicely done, sasha.
Re: Heat by Shardik	<~> 64.252.164.251	28-Apr-04/7:11 PM
nice, dry feeling to this, h. watch the periods. they break it up too much, maybe. give me a reason your face has been turned away by these things, as the rest of you is a part of the schema. maybe not 'death without song' but more so death with an unvoiced sound? lose the ... on the second to last line. it cheapens the poem. the rest, in my opinion, is nicely done.
Re: After the ice season ~ shamelessly lewd revision by zodiac	<~> 64.252.164.251	28-Apr-04/7:31 PM
mistake #1: title and opening line repeat. aaaargh!!! suggested title: 'frisson, unfrozen' why 'ice season'? has it really been an entire season? or just a hastily-made peace that's grown into a rift? 'will we have to get'--dude, economize! save the breath for when you need it! 'must we' will suffice to thaw this ice!! the rest of it melts off my tongue, deliciously. now, if you would only ind a way to ease me in--instead of making me fell like you're cranking that pontiac, hoping it will turn over! bueno.
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 212.219.223.37	29-Apr-04/2:03 AM
This old Daguerreotype of me was taken when I was very much younger, and before the accident, but it will suffice for your purposes. http://pix8.net/files/prbc_dark_angel.jpg
regarding some deleted poem...	Jeremi B. Handrinos 66.229.187.185	28-Apr-04/9:45 PM
I actually would like to be with the pederasts and coulrophobes.
Re: Being by wHorus8w	horus8 66.229.187.185	29-Apr-04/10:35 AM
plagiarist, please don't republish my work.
Re: Jeremi B. Handrinos: Part 2 by wCUNTw	horus8 66.229.187.185	29-Apr-04/10:38 AM
Jeremi is a pleasant young man with supple breasts.
Re: Russian Space Station by wilco	horus8 66.229.187.185	28-Apr-04/11:59 PM
http://www.ibiblio.org/jmaynard/TRONcostume/
regarding some deleted poem...	horus8 66.229.187.185	29-Apr-04/12:05 AM
Slightly poopy, but otherwise fine, 7.
Re: saltwater bath by J.B. Manning	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 212.219.223.37	29-Apr-04/2:15 AM
DR E CARAWAX'S PROTOTYPE CHECKLISTE MARK II [X] Arbitrary indentation [X] Arbitrary linebreaks [X] Melodramatic [X] About romantic love [X] Protaganist is a bummer
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	29-Apr-04/5:52 AM
http://www.pix8.net/files/paris_hilton.jpg
Re: Cold by horus8	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	29-Apr-04/5:54 AM
You'll appreciate this ... http://www.pix8.net/files/brantcam.jpg
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 67.240.192.224	29-Apr-04/6:57 AM
"the workings and the wishings" is a bit of a problem. It could be "workings and wishings," or "workings, wishings [no comma here]" - actually, there shouldn't be a comma after wishings anyway. And "flushed, red," should be "flushed red," I think. Otherwise, this aroused me far more than Fraser's fisting gif did. Advantage: <~>
regarding some deleted poem...	<~> 64.252.164.251	29-Apr-04/9:44 AM
beautiful. but for the last, too-cordial line. it suits not the mood...and i know you can do better, here...
regarding some deleted poem...	<~> 64.252.164.251	29-Apr-04/9:46 AM
yay! sweet, delicate, elusive!
Re: The first Poeme by Everyone by Everyone	Bobjim 213.122.80.1	29-Apr-04/10:19 AM
Using the name everyone does not make the poem belong to everyone, therefore rating the poem does not mean I'm rating myself, therefore the last question is moot.
Re: "Joseph, Joseph" by joe-joe	Bobjim 213.122.80.1	29-Apr-04/10:30 AM
I like it not. There was no discernible meaning or humour.