| Re: I Love You by jude |
daveslady 140.211.124.224 |
28-Apr-04/3:41 PM |
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Ive been there before, funny how things that we think will never change seem to change the most
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Bachus 66.229.187.185 |
28-Apr-04/3:25 PM |
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Violet suede... now that's a lot of woman.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
daveslady 140.211.124.224 |
28-Apr-04/3:58 PM |
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| Re: start here by jsd |
ggawrysi 147.9.151.22 |
28-Apr-04/12:00 PM |
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rather depressing at the end there
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| Re: do androids dream? by nentwined |
ggawrysi 147.9.151.22 |
28-Apr-04/12:03 PM |
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I'm assuming that you've read "I, Robot." The poem reminded me of it; if you haven't read it, definitely pick it up. Isaac Asimov picks up that question and a whole slew of others. As for the poem itself, I like how in four short lines you address two key issues: AI and slavery. Well done.
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Bobjim 213.122.10.94 |
28-Apr-04/12:07 PM |
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I feel it is only fair not to submit my picture since I far outclass you all.
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| Re: Herman by richa |
ggawrysi 147.9.151.22 |
28-Apr-04/12:07 PM |
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all my critiques were previously stated by others. i will simply state that i enjoyed it.
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| Re: The True Irony by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
Bobjim 213.122.10.94 |
28-Apr-04/12:12 PM |
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After reading the comments, I considered reading this.
Then I thought better of it.
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zodiac 152.30.44.158 |
28-Apr-04/1:32 PM |
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Some of this is really nice. The rhythm, though, is so almost-regular it really hits you where it's not.
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richa 81.178.217.164 |
28-Apr-04/1:38 PM |
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It is very tightly packed with language and all that, but where is it going. Anywhere?
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| Re: Horses by ggawrysi |
some deleted user 17.255.240.6 |
28-Apr-04/1:44 PM |
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Good, but why the numbers? Makes it look too corporate.
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| Re: Diary entry (edit) by richa |
some deleted user 17.255.240.6 |
28-Apr-04/1:50 PM |
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Since you told us the wood is the habitat, I'll believe you, but woud not have thought of it that way. Otherwise, I like it much.
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some deleted user 17.255.240.6 |
28-Apr-04/1:55 PM |
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It's hard to grope on the ground after riding a bird. Very nice.
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wilco 24.176.102.131 |
28-Apr-04/2:30 PM |
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| Re: Horses by ggawrysi |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
28-Apr-04/2:34 PM |
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Kinda reminds me (with the numbers) of the old Houghton-Mifflin anthologies from high school.
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| Re: saltwater bath by J.B. Manning |
Joe-joe 68.194.47.34 |
28-Apr-04/4:22 PM |
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The Law of Diminishing Returns asserts that marginal gains in profit begin to decrease at a certain point of production and that this reduction continues as more output is produced until marginal gains are actually negative (negative returns). I believe that this princiiple is actually at play with regard to your work which continues to be highly fragmented and disjointed, lacks originality and is agonizingly melodramatic. It all smells so much like a sorry assed soap opera...Hey but who am I to judge you .....my writing sucks too. Peace Joe-Joe
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| Re: To Hate Love Is To Love Hate by Spindle |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 66.229.187.185 |
28-Apr-04/5:44 PM |
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| Re: Horses by ggawrysi |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 66.229.187.185 |
28-Apr-04/5:45 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 66.229.187.185 |
28-Apr-04/5:49 PM |
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Once, a rumor went abroad that I could snizzle my own weasel because I was triple jointed in the asswagon. Of course it was true. I snhack on my own shrozz.
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| Re: To Hate Love Is To Love Hate by Spindle |
some deleted user 17.255.240.138 |
28-Apr-04/5:56 PM |
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Great title. Good last line. In between a bit sobby.
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