| Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone |
Fear of Garbage 156.63.85.17 |
19-Apr-04/11:01 AM |
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Alright, I get it. Love rhymes with above
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| Re: The Flame by Fire_is_cool |
Fear of Garbage 156.63.85.17 |
19-Apr-04/11:03 AM |
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This is really boring, but at least it wasn't long.
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| Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone |
Shardik 66.229.187.185 |
19-Apr-04/11:40 AM |
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| Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone |
Shardik 66.229.187.185 |
19-Apr-04/11:41 AM |
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Mayday!!! Poem evacute harnesses harnessed... Standby for impact.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Shardik 66.229.187.185 |
19-Apr-04/11:42 AM |
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| Re: 03/30/04 by Lifeboatman |
Shardik 66.229.187.185 |
19-Apr-04/11:45 AM |
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| Re: From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
19-Apr-04/11:57 AM |
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A nicely told boyhood story. Bravo!
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| Re: From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik |
zodiac 152.18.33.195 |
19-Apr-04/12:16 PM |
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Hey, remember all those nights when I was laying your kid sister and you were down in the bottom bunk and you didn't say anything about it or go tell your folks - were you jerking off to us then? God! That's terrible! I mean, it was your ten-year-old sister, for Christ's sake! Shame! Shame!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
zodiac 152.18.33.195 |
19-Apr-04/12:17 PM |
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I don't think you lay the blame 'to' something. You might lay it *on*, or *assign* it to something. Other than that, good.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
wilco 24.176.102.131 |
19-Apr-04/12:39 PM |
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Not your best, but still good and I like it.
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| Re: Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
19-Apr-04/1:19 PM |
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I hate to rewrite anyone's poem, but I think you should change these lines: "you'll find them after your heart is broken" and "if for no other reason than to let them go" and "A waterfall coming faster and stronger" and "But your room's getting smaller these days."
Not bad, or wouldn't have gone to the trouble.
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| Re: Poemranker's Recent Infestation of Teenage Girls by 68.75.19.117 |
Shardik 66.229.187.185 |
19-Apr-04/1:25 PM |
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| Re: The Song of Summer Youth (II) by cleverdevice |
Shardik 66.229.187.185 |
19-Apr-04/1:33 PM |
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| Re: untitled by waxtester |
zodiac 152.18.33.195 |
19-Apr-04/2:00 PM |
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Please post the poem that begins "The gothic clocks struck their tolls" next.
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| Re: untitled by waxtester |
some deleted user 68.66.196.168 |
19-Apr-04/2:01 PM |
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I have no idea what you are talking about. No vote.
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| Re: pondering by xunitedx |
zodiac 152.18.33.195 |
19-Apr-04/2:05 PM |
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everything just makes it worse / youâll never hear me yell "itâs like my life is one big curse"
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| Re: From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik |
zodiac 152.18.33.217 |
19-Apr-04/2:24 PM |
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The last line would be better "We all went home having learned nothing." Maybe that's what you meant. This is one of your best, anyway.
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| Re: Do You Like It by hotwire |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
19-Apr-04/3:05 PM |
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Would that it could be top 40
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| Re: genome home zone by sarah |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
19-Apr-04/3:08 PM |
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catchy, clever title.
kill "of the genome"
"with the want for a familar" to "with want of familiar" - and a very good use of "familiar", too.
I think the ending doesn't do it justice - I know you know what you mean, but the promise of the beginning isn't followed through with this confessional wrap-up.
Know what I mean - one doesn't follow the other; this ending could be tacked onto anything.
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| Re: The Flame by Fire_is_cool |
Shuushin 207.5.211.177 |
19-Apr-04/3:09 PM |
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no. When I like the user name more than the poem, something is broken.
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