regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	19-Apr-04/7:07 AM
http://tinyurl.com/3dof7
Re: stranger by francis nor capule	zodiac 67.240.155.138	19-Apr-04/7:12 AM
Hi. You have no idea how a semicolon works, do you?
Re: stranger by francis nor capule	edpeterson 68.79.28.143	19-Apr-04/7:19 AM
i think this COULD be good, but the punctuation is horribly distracting, as is the poor grammar.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.28.143	19-Apr-04/7:23 AM
pump don't work cause the vandals stole the handles is a rip off of a Dylan song. what is a laut?? a lout?
Re: The Song of Summer Youth (II) by cleverdevice	edpeterson 68.79.28.143	19-Apr-04/7:24 AM
could be good. I won't vote now, because this obviously needs to be edited.
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.28.143	19-Apr-04/7:29 AM
the body of christ. amen the body of christ. amen
Re: Do You Like It by hotwire	edpeterson 68.79.28.143	19-Apr-04/7:31 AM
i can see it being a good song.
Re: Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco	edpeterson 68.79.28.143	19-Apr-04/7:36 AM
it is especially difficult for a reader of lyrics to imagine the beat, the cant, the rhythm of a song, when it does not rhyme. but, even as a poem, i think this is very good.
Re: 03/30/04 by Lifeboatman	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.89	19-Apr-04/8:08 AM
Yeah, I know what you mean. I think you are capable of saying it better. But it stands at a '8' on its own. Thanks for not making it as long as my wordy verses.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 66.159.205.89	19-Apr-04/8:17 AM
God is a target like New Orleans-- Big, Easy. I'm tired of all this worry about God, Jesus, Allah, etc. I'd rather read about your last cable bill and how it reminds you of Andrew Lloyd Weber's awful mis-take on T.S. Elliot's book. T.S., now, there's a real god for you. I know someone who actually touched his terry cloth bathrobe amd was healed from his own obsession with words. Meow.
Re: The Flame by Fire_is_cool	edpeterson 68.79.28.143	19-Apr-04/9:04 AM
better than smoke inhalation, which is more than i can say for many of the others.
regarding some deleted poem...	sarah 68.254.109.126	19-Apr-04/9:38 AM
i like it. i'd like to suggestive you use a descriptive for the dream because i think it would make that stanza more interesting, but other than that... i think it's very good. really liking the second stanza a lot. :) my two cents...
Re: 03/30/04 by Lifeboatman	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	19-Apr-04/9:45 AM
The first verse is good. The second verse is vague, but ok. comfort -> comforts. I think you could do without the last "Dear Diary . . ." Overall, a good effort.
Re: The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi	Shardik 66.229.187.185	19-Apr-04/9:46 AM
God, that was bad, long and bad.
Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone	zodiac 67.240.192.85	19-Apr-04/10:15 AM
These should be broken into the following categories: -'...knowing you're an angel up above.' -'...you're like an angel up above.' -'...blessed by/sent by the Lord above.' -[other objects above.] -[doesn't make any goddamn sense.]
Re: The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	19-Apr-04/10:22 AM
Dear Mr. Poe I liked The Raven better, more fluid somehow, but you've made fine try here with the same Lenore, and even brought a chuckle where the former did not.
Re: Sport by MacFrantic	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	19-Apr-04/10:26 AM
I can only guess what you might be talking about. No vote.
Re: LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	19-Apr-04/10:29 AM
Sorry, but I made it only a quarter of the way through this choppy thing. Please try to be a little more concise.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	19-Apr-04/10:37 AM
Very, very fluid, mystical and haunting. But what does he say? Why should I care? When caressed with such music, feeling it is all that counts.
Re: Laundry by mindsigns	some deleted user 68.66.196.168	19-Apr-04/10:39 AM
~Cute~