regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.77.166	17-Feb-04/7:31 AM
Nice
Re: So Defined Is He! by jasondingus	zodiac 67.240.192.59	17-Feb-04/8:37 AM
Rubbishy rubbish. -0-
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	zodiac 67.240.192.59	17-Feb-04/8:40 AM
I don't get the "we are not in ancient Rome" line. And it needs punctuation from the previous line. And I just don't get it. You could add another line after to clear that up a little. Until then -9-
Re: Freud suggested that I commit murder. by DreamerSupreme	zodiac 67.240.192.59	17-Feb-04/8:45 AM
"lifes'" is really "life's". And the stupid stage notes are just... stupid. And I'm not really that into poems about how crazy the author is. Read Catch-22. -10- <to keep you from sabotaging my hard-earned average ranking lol ;=-)> <>
Re: Freud suggested that I commit murder. by DreamerSupreme	Christof 217.44.77.166	17-Feb-04/8:58 AM
Well, it's sort of clever and witty, but in the end, does it really say anything worth saying? This feels like it should be a scene in an angst-ridden indie comedy film, like Donnie Darko without the rabbit.
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	Christof 217.44.77.166	17-Feb-04/8:59 AM
Very pretty. I don't get the ancient Rome bit either - is this an erudite allusion? If so, please enlighten us, I'm intrigued!
Re: La Belle Epoque by andrewjthomas	Christof 217.44.77.166	17-Feb-04/9:04 AM
Holy crikey this is hard work, like a 21st century Arthur Hugh Clough. I think there's a novelist in you waiting to get out, rather thsn a poet.
Re: Gone Wrong by XpunkXgirlX	Christof 217.44.77.166	17-Feb-04/9:08 AM
1. I'm sorry, this poem has contravened that 1997 European Directiev outlawing the rhyming of 'bad/mad/sad' for at least another 4 centuries. 2. Honestly, there are plenty more fish in the sea.
Re: Wanderlust (1st Draft) by andrewjthomas	Christof 217.44.77.166	17-Feb-04/9:11 AM
This is loads better, evocative, precise, yearning and not prosaic at all (if still a little verbose).
Re: Pre Dance Jitters by Butterflywriter	Christof 217.44.77.166	17-Feb-04/9:16 AM
Rockmage do you give everything a ten? Even when something is full of cliches, you praise it. Do you have any sense of critical distinction? Does this poem really make you feel the fear, terror etc of the narrator? If it did, it would deserve a ten. But it DOESN'T.
regarding some deleted poem...	plinkyponk 62.254.64.7	17-Feb-04/12:00 PM
very funny i thought but liable to offend some people which is probably why i like it a lot..
regarding some deleted poem...	lastobelus 217.82.1.191	17-Feb-04/1:35 PM
Oh yes, most definitely. By an endless variety of meticulously conceived means, each more exquisite than the last, each going beyond what you thought the last time was surely the pinnacle.
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	richa 81.178.235.62	17-Feb-04/1:41 PM
Put an extra verse as the poem did not state the girl was making daisy chains on the grass, still. 'we are not in ancient rome' 'with chains and feet'? (two roman measures).
Re: My heart had a war...no body won by sonawrote	richa 81.178.235.62	17-Feb-04/1:52 PM
Should be reclassified a pimple for the line 'couldn't get your naked bod/ out of my mind' Had me rolling around.
Re: The feeling by devina	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	17-Feb-04/2:46 PM
How hollow is thine head? Sweetmeats und bread.
Re: Your Beauty by Birdman42s	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	17-Feb-04/2:46 PM
Good for a one-armer.
Re: So Defined Is He! by jasondingus	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	17-Feb-04/2:47 PM
Your keyboard is missing some words.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	17-Feb-04/2:48 PM
A maudlin sentiment by a maudlin lil goblin.
Re: Freud suggested that I commit murder. by DreamerSupreme	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	17-Feb-04/2:50 PM
My dripping facial tumors enjoy this one. They splutter their thanks.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.222.81.233	17-Feb-04/2:53 PM
I'm in my closet draped with pepperminted drawers. My bibble smells of the glues of the Elders.