Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT	Goad 217.82.0.76	27-Jan-04/2:25 AM
Interesting, I don't read this as a FU at all, but rather expressing eagerness to learn and be pushed to learn even though it can be torturous. INTRANSIT?
Re: Under a better bed wetter by Shardik	Bobjim 212.135.1.80	27-Jan-04/4:55 AM
Two words: Retard poem. That is all.
Re: Life by 47Ronin	Bobjim 212.135.1.80	27-Jan-04/5:08 AM
Excellent. Almost as good as my "Existence". 10
Re: The Thrapper by You are a fat fucker	47Ronin 212.135.1.57	27-Jan-04/5:12 AM
An interesting concepton the notion of breaking wind. It is all a philosophy.
Re: Are You O.K.? by sonawrote	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	27-Jan-04/6:31 AM
I think it would be a grand percent better without the "without delay" - as it is, its fairly good and I can see it working very well at a poetry reading.
Re: Dry Beast Night by fevriere	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	27-Jan-04/6:41 AM
interesting rhymes and near-word reflections. It struck me (not harshly) more as an exercise, albeit a good one, rather than a poem that can stand on its own; a little too much of one trick in the pony-beast. Having said all that - this beast is a sestina fer crying out loud, and one of the more cogent ones I've read in a while so; huge kudos for that. Nice job.
Re: Drying, Cracked Roots by AnotherNothing	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	27-Jan-04/6:50 AM
I like that it is a non-typical angle on the life of a tree; futility rather than growth and life (the same thing, perhaps). What about changing the last "trees" to a specific kind of trees? Don't do willow - too "done". Alternatively, maybe a specific *part* of a tree (trunks, roots, branches...). anyway, I like what you have, more so for the different perspective.
Re: Our world by 47Ronin	irishfolksuicide 81.178.213.66	27-Jan-04/7:44 AM
there is a sound to irony, and this is not far off.
Re: Lullaby by Goad	irishfolksuicide 81.178.213.66	27-Jan-04/7:47 AM
The war bit and the pills bit look as if they shouldn't be there. Otherwise nicely told
Re: We Need To Buy Socks, Michael by Fear of Garbage	irishfolksuicide 81.178.213.66	27-Jan-04/7:53 AM
Afraid I could not work out the last two lines. Which is a shame because the poem built up well.
Re: Lullaby by Goad	Fear of Garbage 156.63.85.17	27-Jan-04/7:53 AM
this is beautiful. i went into thinking oh god a lullaby, but you surprised me. spiders and pills, spiders and pills. 10
Re: Sissy Faggot by Shardik	irishfolksuicide 81.178.213.66	27-Jan-04/7:58 AM
peter is always such a coy word to use, nice juxtaposition with wipes it on me.
Re: I Go On by drumrgirl30	zodiac 67.240.155.54	27-Jan-04/8:20 AM
The last thing we can afford to be as writers is our own sensitive swooning stereotypes. Think of this as boot camp, drumrgrl, and go on.
Re: Bloom Inside by hatedestruction	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 131.111.212.215	27-Jan-04/8:45 AM
This reminds me of the four years I spent as bo'sun on the treasure scow "Forearms II". Eventually I was discharged for bursting into the officer's mess and stabbing the captain's lobster, dressing up in its boiled pink shell and cavorting and shrieking between the men's bunks until the mate captured me with the emergency jodhpurs. Ah, great days, great days.
Re: So Much**coment this sucks. I want to make it better by Freethinker1602	zodiac 67.240.192.34	27-Jan-04/10:41 AM
And even rockmage dissed it.
Re: My happy warm faith poem by Jeremi B. Handrinos	zodiac 67.240.155.105	27-Jan-04/11:51 AM
Magnificent. I wonder, what will she think? Will she know?
Re: My happy warm faith poem by Jeremi B. Handrinos	Goad 217.82.10.207	27-Jan-04/12:14 PM
there ya go. where's little_big_nose when I need him to rub his nose in something? uh, "Though I have a loving...blister." is an incomplete sentence; are you sure you didn't want a comma there instead of a period? I particularly love the "You are getting sleepy..."
Re: Kernel of truth by annabellee	andrewjthomas 192.150.10.200	27-Jan-04/12:23 PM
husk??? where's Dark Angel when you need him? seriously though, while this is written fine with no serious problems i just didn't feel anything your word choice is a bit boring as are your imagery and i don't know that you really have anything to say here
Re: So Much**coment this sucks. I want to make it better by Freethinker1602	Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.116.54	27-Jan-04/12:05 PM
Well... that was an exploding lukewarm dildo.
Re: My happy warm faith poem by Jeremi B. Handrinos	andrewjthomas 192.150.10.200	27-Jan-04/12:28 PM
don't you mean supple instead of subtle? i don't see anything subtle about her breasts personally of course, i'm sure that could just be part of the joke