| Re: Dolphins Of Dorset by Caducus |
A. Nomaly 205.184.203.74 |
11-Dec-03/1:22 PM |
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I like all your new stuff! KC
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| Re: She is A Lover Deep Within by Joe-joe |
dragonfly 65.234.193.223 |
11-Dec-03/1:13 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
A. Nomaly 205.184.203.74 |
11-Dec-03/1:20 PM |
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hooray for tomcheese! U got somethin' to say!
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| Re: The Spirit Of Giving by Miggy |
dragonfly 65.234.193.223 |
11-Dec-03/1:39 PM |
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| Re: Preserves for the basement (Poe Poetry) by Bachus |
dragonfly 65.234.193.223 |
11-Dec-03/1:46 PM |
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| Re: standing still by phbiscuit |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/2:19 PM |
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Once, my toes quivered me a quilt, but then I donated it to Denis QuAIDS. Twice, my toes linted my a dollar, but me spaint it on me Maman.
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| Re: Henrietta IV by A. Nomaly |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/2:35 PM |
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"Adoring them" somehow didn't end it for me on the right foot. It's close, but not as close as I know you can get.
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| Re: Head. by darby pyn |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/2:37 PM |
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| Re: Let Go by PunkyPanda |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/2:39 PM |
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That's about as punk rock as a warm lemonade slurpee.
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| Re: Hurt by PunkyPanda |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/2:42 PM |
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I think you should slice open your chest and definitely let all of that guilt out. I mean if you keep it inside any longer it might kill you?
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| Re: Use Me by dragonfly |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/2:44 PM |
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Splooge, nappy, overflowing in the trash can.
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| Re: Let Go by PunkyPanda |
PunkyPanda 198.81.26.81 |
11-Dec-03/3:00 PM |
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I appreciate all of your comments...Audrey, Lol. But as far as "Baby Yaga" do I sense sarcasm?
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| Re: Dolphins Of Dorset by Caducus |
richa 81.178.243.83 |
11-Dec-03/3:04 PM |
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like the idea dolphins of dorset (there are no dolphins in dorset) it sounds kind of folklore, gives a nice gentle feel.
Like the snappy wisdom (almost beatish) of searching for god, and memory is a friend.
One quibble, the final verse 'my thorns'. Seems detached from the earlier metaphor. Needs to follow through the image of cutting yourself on the thorns.
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| Re: Henrietta IV by A. Nomaly |
richa 81.178.243.83 |
11-Dec-03/3:09 PM |
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Good this, again though the last line should be your power punch and 'adoring them' isn't there. The poem certainly strikes a chord.
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| Re: the universe is throbbing by FreeFormFixation |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/3:31 PM |
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Do you think the united nations is concerned as much about electrons as you are?
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| Re: Hurt by PunkyPanda |
dragonfly 67.192.110.189 |
11-Dec-03/3:47 PM |
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0_o I'm lost. Ok, so you hurt someone and you feel guilty about it. BUT, the sight of them being happy makes you want to die?
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| Re: Let Go by PunkyPanda |
dragonfly 67.192.110.189 |
11-Dec-03/3:54 PM |
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Well this is definitely better than your last piece. I totally know how it feels to want someone so bad even though you are fully aware they could care less. Still, it seems like a rant. Your ellipses is missing a third dot...
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| Re: Liberty bells & Disney Land by horus8 |
capachijim 24.168.26.48 |
11-Dec-03/4:51 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/4:52 PM |
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I forgot what it was like to vomit on my computer screen after reading one of your various lyrical dumplings.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.116.54 |
11-Dec-03/4:56 PM |
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The crossroads are the wrong place to find jesus I'm afraid. But the right place to itch an old scratch.
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