Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	19-Apr-07/9:02 AM
May I try the next verse for you: An awkward fumbling at my bra, A great bulging stiffy in your jeans, Subsides in a damp, cloying puddle, I must attend myself, by artificial means.
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 76.172.249.205	19-Apr-07/7:07 PM
No reason to put "(child abuse)" in the title. We get that. For your next one try to come up with an analogy that describes the situation, but relating to a different object/setting.
Re: Pink BAlls by EAger to Offend	half.italian 76.172.249.205	19-Apr-07/7:08 PM
7 for the laugh.
Re: Always there by holliebollie_19	half.italian 76.172.249.205	19-Apr-07/7:11 PM
Kinda nice.
Re: Makin' Bacon by NICKDRP	half.italian 76.172.249.205	19-Apr-07/7:16 PM
Kinda reminds me of a Dr. Suess.
Re: Pink BAlls by EAger to Offend	Sasha 128.135.197.101	20-Apr-07/9:56 PM
Ha
Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010	Sasha 128.135.197.101	20-Apr-07/10:00 PM
You rhymed kiss and bliss. That alone earns you the great award of "cliché." You also refer to bliss as heavenly. This earns the award of "overt cliché." You use absolutely no novel imagery or language or even display the slightest awareness that a poem is a form of artwork. In other words, this is a bad poem for just about every reason a poem can be bad. -2- for effort
Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010	Sasha 128.135.197.101	20-Apr-07/10:03 PM
You also had poor enough taste to VOTE ON YOUR OWN POEM ANONYMOUSLY.
Re: The Corner Tavern by jessicazee	Sasha 128.135.197.101	20-Apr-07/10:04 PM
It's like mallarmé , but without the musicality and with a damp lyricism.
Re: What it Feels Like by laurahenn2010	mr cunt 85.210.199.241	21-Apr-07/5:18 PM
This is very sexy. I have shot my load.
regarding some deleted poem...	mr cunt 85.210.199.241	21-Apr-07/5:20 PM
Pretentious and wordy.
Re: bimby by sneakerpimp	mr cunt 85.210.199.241	21-Apr-07/5:20 PM
Not very good is it?
Re: On The Gay Beach by Edna Sweetlove	mr cunt 85.210.199.241	21-Apr-07/5:21 PM
Kinky stuff - I think I know the place.
Re: Israel (Through The Eyes Of One Jewish Soul) by slana5	mr cunt 85.210.199.241	21-Apr-07/5:22 PM
Why submit the same poem twice? It's still nasty fascist rubbish.
Re: Always there by holliebollie_19	Sasha 128.135.197.101	22-Apr-07/5:35 AM
cliché
Re: Easter by thetrev	Sasha 128.135.197.101	22-Apr-07/5:36 AM
"Literary" in the worst sense of the word
Re: Forbidden by jduzz	Sasha 128.135.197.101	22-Apr-07/5:37 AM
You've got to be kidding. This is some of the most cliché crap I've seen
Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT	thetrev 86.20.231.0	22-Apr-07/11:18 AM
i don't think you need "jealous". great otherwise.
Re: Unsung American Dream by SupremeDreamer	Dental Panic 84.27.244.4	22-Apr-07/3:06 PM
time for a commercial break.
Re: Ein Kampf by Sasha	Dental Panic 84.27.244.4	22-Apr-07/3:33 PM
better not have kids, then.