cute. :)

I'm curious as to whether the gun is to be used against or in defense of the child, or something else entirely.

A hero you shall be on the little yellow bus indeed.

gre8t

duh

I can't quite tell if this is telling someone off and expecting a continued relationship or it is a very long good-bye, don't let the door slam too hard on your backside as you get going kind of thing. It is certainly nicely said... both in execution and choice of language. A gentle farewell? A polite go to hell? Or knowing my abilty to miss the point, neither or both. Have a 10.

"The sawed-off between his fesses." is interesting - is the implication he was shot in the chest? Never seen fesses used like that - works for me, though.

knives 'drove' -> 'driven'? relatively interesting piece for an 'angst' poem. couldn't quite get into the flow.

nice juxtaposition.

I read this with pain. 8.

Cheers you guys its nice to have people on my side for once ("sniff") but i will now have to eat you all!

Needs more line breaks, and needs more explanation about what's going on.

pretty depressing.

Spoken like a true trained killer. Is this a fantasy about killing for your country?

say more about the beautiful scars, why were they beautiful? did she move on?

obviously he doesn't know how to use either one.

sad. truly sad.

Is that "E" for ecstasy? I liked your analogy.

Is okay, has some good language in it. The, "Clicking glass upon a tooth" is very cool. I like the whole machine gunner sidetrip. Would L4 read better if it had an "a" before barely? I know: picky, picky, picky.

Why do you care what stupid negative people think? This one is very moving and well written.