some deleted user
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2003, 2:48 PM
"Punctuation is a chain by which it seems mostly everyone but me hangs. There is not a box I will crawl in. While I admit that Punctuation does help prose flow, poetry cries the reverse. Never liked the language natzi. I don't accept the lame excuse that period and comma add to my detractors. Arise all you downtrodden brainwashed minions of english (or other) major/minors and slip your collars and chains." Well said, I feel the same way about caps. It still reads the same. If the reader is actually reading the poem they will have no problem interpeting it. There are no rules for art...it's a pleasure if there were...it would be a task eh? :) ;)
some deleted user
on Unloyal Poon (Free Puss) by A Spanish Devil by <{Baba^Yaga}>
3 Oct 2003, 2:50 PM
This is a piece for the hounds. Surely you must have a life? Why re-write my poetry? PLEASE for all of us...get out and get some sun!
Titles pliz. So that I might wipe my pooky with it's fine binding spine.
Here's a green seven for your brass ballz.
I like most of it, but there are a couple parts that I didn't feel completely struck by.
This one being my favorite part...
Stretch limbing dusks' arc
The red under your bark
And how you left your mark
On me, never the seasons...
I flows smoothly, but there are a couple parts that I feel were...well that they were for lack of better words, basically. Like, "a God of thunder," I dunno...seemed like something you would write when you'er young.
I think this is the best poem I've read on this yet to date. Honestly.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2003, 3:50 PM
?????????--> Bachus 24.126.113.154, horus8 24.126.113.154, Shardik 24.126.113.154, <{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.113.154 Hmm...funny who those who leave nasty comments and re-write my poetry( Re: Unloyal Poon (Free Puss) by A Spanish Devil by <{Baba^Yaga}>) ALL have the same IP. Surely this person must have a life? I mean to go and re-write one of my pieces?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2003, 3:51 PM
Baba...?????????--> Bachus 24.126.113.154, horus8 24.126.113.154, Shardik 24.126.113.154, <{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.113.154 Hmm...funny who those who leave nasty comments and re-write my poetry( Re: Unloyal Poon (Free Puss) by A Spanish Devil by <{Baba^Yaga}>) ALL have the same IP. Surely this person must have a life? I mean to go and re-write one of my pieces?
"death" is only a he, because you make him one in your poem. Death is not the last thing, but the least thing.
More cuts? i was looking for death warmed over easy. My suggestion would be Don't over use an overused style overly. 8
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2003, 4:02 PM
Jeremi B. Handrinos 24.126.113.154 I'm adding this name to the other list! Bachus 24.126.113.154, horus8 24.126.113.154, Shardik 24.126.113.154, <{Baba^Yaga}> 24.126.113.154 Too many people...1 IP.
some deleted user
on My Show at the Whiskey a Go Go on the 26th of August 2003 by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Oct 2003, 4:04 PM
You comment on your own work?
I dig the ending.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2003, 4:08 PM
A bird got me once on my way to school when I was around 12. Nasty lil buggers! ;)
-how a young man is lead to neo-nazism and the kkk...
jealousy and cock size can produce some interesting and unpleasant results.. heh. 8.
hey, mr "president"... what about the boogie man, broken down heating systems, wornout and thin blankets
(lets not forget those creapy whisperings and shadows that morph into monsters before my eyes)
jesus christ.
dubbed "dont worry, you dont need to wet the bed little child, its ok, your safe and sound.. *FART*"
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heh. dont look at me, im not shy to shout
CRAPPY POEM 0 0 0 0!!!
in wonderfull green attire.
you should see my musehearts swimming lessons poem.. it has a ton of blue zeros and even a green one (all of the zeros are musehearts- she didnt appreciate my public overview of her writing..)
theres no point in calling these folks out, since they arent "brave" enough to be upfront with their judgements- most of them.. others just have an obsessive hate for certain poems/poets- welcome to rankerville, its a jungle which is infested with barbarians and tamed animals alike.
btw, heres a six.
ps: whats your obsession with old world english usage? its corny and.. simply serves little purpose here except to downgrade your work.. in my opinion.
Weirdly vaguely literate. That's Aced!